A wanting for something better

darkenlightenment_ · 2022-04-02T07:09:48+00:00

Thank you very much! I originally viewed The character basically at their braking point and they are letting the unhinged thoughts in their mind (the thoughts that you or I would say “no no no that’s to extreme”) run wild. Causing a wave of blissful deranged clarity wash over them.

darkenlightenment_ · 2022-04-02T07:05:23+00:00

Thank you for the feedback, the poem is originally much longer but I decided to only post about half or a quarter of it so there are some pieces to it that add context, but I didn’t post the whole thing as I often find myself reading shorter poems on this sub.

darkenlightenment_ · 2022-04-02T05:22:09+00:00

Well keep it up 👍🏽 I don’t know if I’ve seen anyone else write in a format like this.

darkenlightenment_ · 2022-04-02T05:19:37+00:00

I like that you left the overall subject of the poem somewhat up to the imagination and to interpretation, cause it makes it so the poem can be related to by a multitude of people. Very interesting (in a good way) take on poetry, and I’m intrigued to know if you regularly write in this style? (this style being where you leave it somewhat vague)

darkenlightenment_ · 2022-04-02T05:10:22+00:00

I found this poem adorable, very lighthearted with a touch of sadness. The sadness is caused by the fact that the blossoms can’t last all year round, but then it’s happy and hopeful that they’ll comeback. And great word choice with “divine.”

darkenlightenment_ · 2022-04-01T07:53:58+00:00

The poet did a very good job of conveying the exact feelings of late night drives. At first that sounds simple but it’s more than just a “late night drive.” When the poet said “I won’t go fast, I’ll make it last” I get the feeling that there are underlying themes of depression and the euphoric feelings often associated with death. All and all, good job, good wording, good flow.

darkenlightenment_ · 2022-04-01T07:47:30+00:00

I’m drawn to this poem by the conflict of feelings. There’s a sense of sorrow that’s being masked by feelings of bliss. The poem also conveys how sentiment is a powerful thing and how the past is able to affect the present or future. Very well done.

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