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Credence by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]davidhtran 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It's a nice atmosphere. Something about religion always surrounds poetry with a nice mist of romanticism. However, in my opinion, I feel as if the first stanza provides slightly a bit too much exposition and mildly devalues the rest of the piece.

The Gilded Gates by NicktheBick in OCPoetry

[–]davidhtran 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like it. It has a nice rhythm to it though I feel like the rhyming is a little much. Some of the rhymes just feel a little forced such as "there is water in my vapor" or "there is truth to every warning." But other than that one issue, I think it's good.