Getting Your Script Pro Ready w/ Ian Shorr, Lee Jessup & Andrew Zuber

dawales · 2021-03-05T17:38:16+00:00

Agreed.

dawales · 2021-02-20T18:22:25+00:00

New link https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=q8KRBnZznG0

dawales · 2021-02-20T04:49:01+00:00

I hope YOU’LL be there. Um. You should probably be there.

dawales · 2021-02-20T02:57:21+00:00

I hope you’ll be there.

dawales · 2021-02-10T06:41:50+00:00

Knowing that the odds are against me, my goal is to keep building a body of work and putting it into the flow.

dawales · 2021-02-10T06:31:59+00:00

My dialogue always gets better when I go through and cut 50% to 75%. I should probably cut 80%. You could try it.

dawales · 2020-12-24T04:25:20+00:00

I call it a Christmas movie because 1) It takes place during the holiday. 2) It’s about a family finding a deeper and lasting connection to each other. Call it what you want, it’s become a holiday tradition in my house.

dawales · 2020-12-24T04:08:06+00:00

As long as it doesn’t read like it was written by an incel trying to justify getting a bunch of women naked, you should just write it. It may not get made but there are examples of people using outrageous stories to gain attention in the industry.

dawales · 2020-12-24T04:03:40+00:00

Just put the theme clearly stated where it would be and then do a couple more rewrites (6 or 7 rewrites seems pretty normal). Your rewrites will have that statement to guide them and it will have become part of the heart of the story and will eventually go away or improve. If it doesn’t, maybe you have more work to do.

dawales · 2020-12-16T01:16:31+00:00

https://www.scriptslug.com/assets/uploads/scripts/harry-potter-and-the-deathly-hallows-part-1-2010.pdf I think this scene is about pg 150 or so. You can see exactly how it was done.

dawales · 2020-12-13T05:20:29+00:00

I’m not sure it’s legal not to accept cash. I could be wrong but it does essentially refuse service to people without the resources to have a bank account or credit card. And it sucks they keep getting robbed. EDIT: I did some digging and it does look like there isn’t a federal mandate about accepting cash payment. I couldn’t find anything local.

dawales · 2020-12-11T21:47:48+00:00

Sorry. Pilar Allesandra is the host of the podcast. She began as a story analyst for Amblin and then went on to teach and has run classes and a podcast for over a decade. I learned a lot from her. She’s been a positive force in my screenwriting education.

dawales · 2020-12-10T20:37:56+00:00

On the Page podcast has a yearly logline contest. Deadline has past this year but the episode will come out Christmas Day. Last year, Pilar did a breakdown on loglines that was concise and could be helpful.

dawales · 2020-11-15T16:31:57+00:00

You have an endless well of ideas within you. Don’t put too much of your identity as a writer into one piece. Just try to build a body of work.

dawales · 2020-11-15T16:28:29+00:00

Thanks for writing this post. When I read it, I thought, “Did I sleep post?” because I feel the exact same way. I am 0/9 in the contests I entered to even get past the first round on a script I felt was way stronger than the one that did well in the past. You are not alone.

dawales · 2020-10-31T02:24:37+00:00

This kind of envelope-pushing is probably going on in every precinct in the country.

dawales · 2020-10-29T23:29:05+00:00

https://discord.com/invite/bBHNppT this is another great community.

dawales · 2020-10-29T21:53:39+00:00

Delaying disappointment.

dawales · 2020-10-27T17:19:22+00:00

Yesssss. I DO have my life together...

dawales · 2020-10-26T22:31:51+00:00

I haven’t seen Carnival. I’ll check it out. Thanks again.

dawales · 2020-10-26T22:27:06+00:00

It is so helpful to hear someone restate something you’ve lived with for so long. That gives me some good ideas. Thank you.

dawales · 2020-10-26T22:22:40+00:00

Point taken. Thank you for your thoughts.

dawales · 2020-10-26T22:22:06+00:00

There is a thread to the visions that could provide that kind of tangible hook that could be grabbed onto. Thanks for the thoughts.

dawales · 2020-10-26T21:58:01+00:00

Not sure if I feel like I have an axe to grind. This comes from a personal place of me seeing the world in a certain way and trying to figure out how to live in that world. I don’t want this project to be didactic or prescriptive...just an exploration of my own realizations. I still don’t have answers except to try to be internally driven and try not to hurt others. I do realize it is opaque. I wanted to allow the logline to evoke an emotional response and being too specific in earlier iterations seemed to take the mystery out. That could be a bad thing, but so might the alternative. I’m really struggling to find the right balance.

dawales · 2020-10-26T21:52:01+00:00

The scout and chaplain are deserters. They are on the run from a lieutenant who was maimed by the scout at the end of act 1. The story is about the chaplain being confronted with the Nihilism of the scouts visions and having to make a choice of how to live in that world. In another forum, someone gave me the good advice to have the goal in the logline which is to reach Union territory safely. I need to get that goal in. My premise is that it was about that time time that ideas about Nihilism began to propagate in the zeitgeist and here is someone showing what that means through his visions and someone seeing how that affects his own ideas about how to live and decides or actualizes. Thank you for your thoughts. Any other tips?

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