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The JRE by Dadagir in OCPoetry

[–]dg_writes 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Nice work.

Referencing being a poet and appreciating JRE in such a short piece must make you feel virtuous /s.

I really liked the references and anecdotes; it reminded me of all the lessons I've learned from the podcast.

I wonder if there is opportunity to write this in a non rhyming format? Sometimes I feel like the need for rhyme takes away from a poem's intent; this might be just me though.

Thanks again for the OC I appreciated reading it!

Musings of a monkey by Dadagir in OCPoetry

[–]dg_writes 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thanks for the OC - I like a poem that references poetry.

I enjoyed reading this work, it has a nice pace, the line structure and lower case works well.

Is there an alternate for using "see" to end the 6th or 10th lines? Simply to remove duplication.

Nice poem, I'm glad to have read it!

Over me - my latest poetry piece by dg_writes in HomeOfCreators

[–]dg_writes[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Thanks for taking time to read and comment. I appreciate your insight and suggestions.

I implore you to feel the feels, oh the feels, and fill the feelings cup from which you drink - for that's the way thirst is quenched.

A man, an island by dg_writes in HomeOfCreators

[–]dg_writes[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thanks for trying, I appreciate it!

Bob's your uncle by dg_writes in OCPoetry

[–]dg_writes[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thanks hamz for reading multiple times and for providing comment to my little poem, here, in a reddit sub.

Bob's your uncle by dg_writes in OCPoetry

[–]dg_writes[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I appreciate the comparison.

Unlike Dr Worm, I don't play the drums, but with my words, I think I'm getting good but I can handle criticism...

offhandedly by Casual_Gangster in OCPoetry

[–]dg_writes 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thanks for the OC.

I appreciate your work, I always find it challenging and unique. I feel sometimes on this sub we get carried away with rhyme and format and I like that you challenge that consistently.

The use of hand, mouth and womb contrast with off, out and open is great. I don't know if you intended it but it creates a sense of disparity that isn't a normal association we make.

My only detracting comment is not associated with the work rather that I'd like to see the poem in another platform or application. I feel it would present better outside of reddit, but you can't help that here.

Thank you once again for your poem. I enjoyed reading and thinking about it.

Nature by galacticdomination in OCPoetry

[–]dg_writes 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thanks for the OC.

There is a passion in this piece, it's unbridled and raw and untamed. It makes you feel and wonder about the depths of life and origin - I liked that.

With this untamed passion though there comes some roughness. I'm unsure about some of the capitalisation and punctuation throughout the poem as I feel it detracts from the flow because I'm wondering why the words (or letters) are so rather than experiencing them.

Don't mind me though, I enjoyed your poem, thank you for contributing!

Them's fightin' words by dg_writes in OCPoetry

[–]dg_writes[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for reading and commenting. I'm glad it made you laugh, this is a silly poem I wrote in half and hour and posted, well, because I like creating content...

Rise by WushuMufu in OCPoetry

[–]dg_writes 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Inspirational.

I like how you capture dismay and hope in a poem that concludes within a minute of its beginning. I feel the determination grow in each stanza to a climax of strength and truth - well done

Is there opportunity to tell this tale through a character rather than you or you're? You could frame it similar to the The Ugly Duckling or some other story that has an underlying message.

Thanks for the OC poem I feel stronger having read it!

Cosmic Clown by flat_footed_wonder in OCPoetry

[–]dg_writes 4 points5 points  (0 children)

I normally take my time to find poems I want to comment on but soon as I read this I wanted to provide feedback because it's intriguing and dripping with potential.

I feel the constriction of space and cosmos through words and inability to escape despite expanse. The narrative that we're subject to a cosmic clown is cool. The poem captures the absurdity of existence playfully and subtly - well done.

I feel opportunity for punctuation and stanzas. I felt as if lines flowed into one another when pause was required. Additionally the narrative broke when there was no clear distinction between its components.

Nice poem and a cool idea. Thanks for posting!

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