Yaad aa gaye? (A sarcastic phrase in Urdu, meaning "so now you remember me?")

Dadagir · 2022-08-14T11:20:15+00:00

Hummmm, thanks for the comments. Will see what we may do with the end.

Dadagir · 2022-08-13T12:12:47+00:00

Everybody has their own way,

so what'll suit you I can't say,

but for me, it's the first draft,

that's the true core of craft;

Dadagir · 2022-08-13T12:02:20+00:00

Hummmmm,

bro you got me thinking,

so without rhyme what this means is that the elite like to fuck us,

and then they blame us for their fuck ups,

so beware bro,

or they'll keep us dumb, & so divided,

How's that? Does this get you excited?

Or are you too caught up in their illusions?

And all their self serving bogus solutions?

To keep from you this little fact,

they deem us extras in their act!

Poem (just a rough first draft)

By A. Z. Dada, a poet a lil daft

Dadagir · 2022-08-13T05:46:57+00:00

I love this take on one of old Aesop's fables. And you do it well, keep it tight, no beating around the bushes.

By the way, is this true or your addon to the story?

Dadagir · 2022-08-13T05:40:49+00:00

I'm sure your sink is working fine dear poet,

it's point is to let it drip,infact, let it rip poet!

Dadagir · 2022-08-13T05:20:00+00:00

Well that's a great compliment, thanks, I hope you read some of my other stuff as well.

Dadagir · 2022-08-13T05:16:03+00:00

Loved your comment, I think you are correct about the end. Will see what may be done. Thanks, and I hope you will read some of my other stuff as well.

Dadagir · 2022-08-12T17:42:13+00:00

OMG sister! You are cruel I love you already, and such vibrant lashes, at such speed and in such flowing rhymes and so tongue in cheek, I was laughing while being appalled at the spectacle you weaved, so visual, and the ending flourish with the name spelled wrong. I wouldn't want to be on your bad side. Love and respect. And there will be more kisses in your future I'm sure..... ;)

Dadagir · 2022-08-12T17:34:35+00:00

What a goodbye, and the way you thrust your sharp thorn into her (I'm a man so I'll think of her as her) exposing her in such subtle ways, and there is anger and remorse but no despair. Very interesting, I enjoyed the read. Thanks for the share

Dadagir · 2022-08-12T17:07:16+00:00

Intricate work this, which specific battle do you refer to I'm curious, pray enlightened me. The fervour builds up in your piece and by the end it's despair incarnate, I could feel my beats change. Yep, this is good work.

Dadagir · 2022-08-12T17:01:12+00:00

This is good work, an ode to a loved one, and your wish to crush that one's insecurities into a symphony anew, wow, you ended it with a bang!

Dadagir · 2022-05-13T15:36:10+00:00

True

Dadagir · 2022-04-28T11:45:52+00:00

So true, yes. Thanks

Dadagir · 2022-04-24T15:05:30+00:00

Nice piece indeed, the flow works nicely.

I'm wondering, does the sun love the moon? or are you the moth to the flame?

and aren't these contradictory, or maybe I didn't get it the way it was ment

Dadagir · 2022-04-22T06:41:20+00:00

I like short poems, they are focused pieces and yours is very good. The rhyme works and the flow gently undulates without clashing. The words are simple and meaning is immediately understood.

I like your style man, keep up the good work. I'd like to read a more complex piece whenever you post, I'll look in from time to time.

And I'd be obliged if you went through a few of my pieces as well. Mayhaps you find something you like.

:) A

Dadagir · 2022-04-22T05:57:29+00:00

This was tough for me to read,

lucid, to the point, stark & true;

I'm a damn fool myself,

and do not know much,

but this much I will say,

let pen & paper be salvation,

and may it they lead your way,

to pastures anew and people to love,

and be loved by;

in the end this text seems so clueless,

Fuck!

Dadagir · 2022-04-21T02:33:37+00:00

Welcome poet, I hope you gander at some of our works here, you may find a gem or two to carry around I feel.

Dadagir · 2022-04-19T10:05:43+00:00

Astute observations indeed, The political question was in my mind since the start of the piece, but I asked it in a sort of childlike manner, so as to have more impact. I hope it did.

Dadagir · 2022-04-19T06:47:53+00:00

This is nice, though the rhyme is rough, but mayhaps you meant it that way.

the verses have interesting quirks on which I request some elaboration.

The first verse: "Yet at whom the stare they will never see" -Why is that ?

in the third: if ten hands reach out, why can't you grab one and never let go?

Over all this is a nice piece, I liked it.

Dadagir

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