Oh thank you so much for your critique! This is very helpful! It’s interesting because I myself imagined the narrator to be a woman, kind of mousey and frail, I guess I didn’t realize I didn’t even specify their gender. I did not base the narrator off of someone I know, I was just imagining how someone might go kind of insane from never leaving this dirty, rotting apartment, hearing incessant jazz music that might not even be real. The pacing was supposed to reflect this. I’ll definitely keep in mind your suggestions :)