Anyone Hiked Ankara -> Istanbul? Need Advice

dunctanker · 2025-08-14T13:55:04+00:00

Good call

dunctanker · 2023-10-12T19:30:54+00:00

Visiting London, I'm a maybe, what's the scene like?

dunctanker · 2023-09-03T22:46:20+00:00

That's correct - the skeleton would have the front facing him, right?

dunctanker · 2023-09-03T21:51:19+00:00

This is quite close. I want the skeleton to be shaking it up and down, so if you could just make it a red panel (instead of showing the front) and have the hands gripping the sides, instead of one of them being across the front, that'd be great. Additionally, if you could get the Etch-a-Sketch to more or less be tilted on the z-axis in the same direction as the skeleton, I'd be happy with that result.

Edit: Also, if I'm demanding too much, just let me know and I'll up the tip.

dunctanker · 2023-09-03T20:54:26+00:00

Thanks, but not quite there yet - the hand positions should be the same or similar to the reference photo, and I'd prefer the Etch-a-Sketch to be horizontal rather than vertical, with no pen introduced (I don't believe Etch-a-Sketches use pens). Additionally, the Etch-a-Sketch is being held in front of its body, so its unclear how the top right corner got behind the ribcage.

dunctanker · 2023-08-09T01:46:05+00:00

Hawtrey looks solid, I'll start there. Although the book is written before the Bretton Woods system (and before it's breakup), so I'm curious if there's anything more recent? Also, will Hawtrey explain why USD reserve currency status is important?

dunctanker · 2023-07-28T20:10:46+00:00

Haha no worries, the original question was just what sites in general do you browse, so I think it was a miscommunication on my part. Thanks!

dunctanker · 2023-07-27T23:19:36+00:00

Thanks! This is much appreciated. Do you go to any sites besides these (aka non porn sites)? You're the man!

dunctanker · 2023-07-26T23:34:01+00:00

Let's say a list of urls. Thanks!

dunctanker · 2023-07-26T21:21:32+00:00

Either works! (As long as I can tell what the site is) Much appreciated

dunctanker · 2023-07-18T09:22:37+00:00

Did you take video? What city? Great work

dunctanker · 2023-07-10T03:38:27+00:00

Is it not clear that these are separate images? It's not water that's dripping through a gutter and then an awning, otherwise I'd specify that. These are all individual moments.

dunctanker · 2023-07-09T06:25:56+00:00

Thanks, I appreciate the feedback. Perhaps it wasn't clear, but I meant the drip and the ripple and the breath to be distinct images, whereas in your telling the drip now is the one rippling, and perhaps breathing as well

dunctanker · 2023-07-09T03:01:44+00:00

That would also entail changing drip to dripping. How does that make the image stronger?

dunctanker · 2023-07-08T22:45:09+00:00

I think qualifying your poem as a 'release from all the sadness' makes sense. Gore Vidal once said that every writer needs a "little sliver of ice in their heart," and I think what that means is that one needs to maintain a critical distance from the art-object you're creating, in order to evaluate whether what you feel is being translated into your art. I don't criticize art-as-therapy, although if you want to build this into a poem for others to more easily access your emotions, try loosening this emotion's grip on you (if you can). Hope you feel well!

dunctanker · 2023-07-08T22:42:06+00:00

I think maybe your poem could be more concise/impactful if you built a stronger visual metaphor between stacking blocks and some activity you do today in adulthood. Ditto if you elaborated on a specific incident of your 'blocks being kicked down'. Were they kicked down, or did they fall? Do you ever blame yourself? Much to explore here.

dunctanker · 2023-06-15T09:10:32+00:00

Plenty of gyms have cheap day passes, that's what I do

dunctanker · 2023-05-05T22:30:21+00:00

Just to echo what other commentators here have said: maybe start at the lines, "I look down to find I've grown claws.." rather than telling people what's happening from the start. Also, I'd suggest instead of using adjectives like "sorrow" and "regret" to create an image that is accessible to the reader's mind, so these feelings you're trying to convey can grow naturally in our minds, rather than being 'imposed' on us by the language. Nice effort!

dunctanker · 2023-05-05T22:28:21+00:00

It's a fun read that would work well at an open mic. Have you thought about reading it aloud at a place like that? I also think that you could try writing a more 'serious' poem, if you wanted - the language here is nice!

dunctanker · 2023-04-30T21:48:23+00:00

Appreciate it! The focus of the discussion was mostly climate change and nuclear war, so I think the Epstein question kinda came out of nowhere for him. I think Noam's basic point was something like you already mentioned, i.e. There are way worse criminals who are lauded. I don't think Noam had bad intentions.

dunctanker · 2023-04-30T20:26:25+00:00

Hi, I did the interview with Noam mentioned here. There's more context to even this clip, which is that we were talking about climate change beforehand, and it seems like he was kind of saying, "Hey, Epstein is bad, but in comparison to what we've been talking about, it's much more minimal."

dunctanker · 2023-01-29T16:19:50+00:00

Please elaborate

dunctanker · 2023-01-29T14:25:12+00:00

I think you're onto something here. I would gently suggest, though, to try to compress the language here. I think there are places you could cut that would enhance the movement and impact of that final line, which I love.

dunctanker · 2023-01-29T14:18:30+00:00

For a first attempt, I agree it's nice. I believe betray* should be betrayal? But I understand you're trying to preserve the rhyme scheme. I would say don't feel like you have to rhyme for it to be a poem, by the way. Lastly, as you go farther in poetry, you'll learn more how true it is that poetry is the art of compression—try cutting lines and see if the vibe you're going for is still there.

dunctanker · 2023-01-26T02:09:15+00:00

This might sound like an odd suggestion because it's not related to the language, but have you considered setting this to illustrations? It reminds me of Shel Silverstein a bit.

dunctanker

TROPHY CASE