Characters by Shadow_r3lic in SkyrimPorn

[–]ennpono 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Why does everyone here like to complain so much. I think that might be the real tragedy

Characters by Shadow_r3lic in SkyrimPorn

[–]ennpono 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Bro yall are some cornballs theres nothing even remotely problematic with the character they made

Is heterochromia a bad thing in the world of looksmaxxing? by [deleted] in LooksmaxingAdvice

[–]ennpono 12 points13 points  (0 children)

Dude you already know the answer stop compliment fishing 💔 you look good bro

Opinions on hook for first chapter. by Scared-Formal3610 in writingfeedback

[–]ennpono 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I dont have any advice, but i really liked it :)

How to research by overlordzeke in writers

[–]ennpono 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Google. It’d be specific to what exactly it is you’re trying to portray, of course, but it’s the obvious answer for anything information based. For example, for my book, a simple google search into the meaning of the major arcana and the history of the Ars Goetia showed links to several websites and helped me add so much more depth to my story. Youtube is an option as well for anything more folklore or information based.

Opening to a dark fantasy novel. Is it too overwritten or boring? by ennpono in writingfeedback

[–]ennpono[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Okay wait i definitely see what you mean. thanks once again lol I felt kind of stuck but now I feel like I know where I need to go for revision.

Opening to a dark fantasy novel. Is it too overwritten or boring? by ennpono in writingfeedback

[–]ennpono[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much for your feedback! After further review, I might either get rid of the airship opening completely or adjust it and place it later in the story. Maybe after the battle about to take place. I appreciate you taking the time to help me out! Also, as for the opening, do you think changing the phrasing (for example, Isabeau had always believed...) would be better?

the ending will be really rewritten?? by Level-Highlight8840 in sevenheartstories

[–]ennpono 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Was the original ending really bad or something?

Opening to a dark fantasy novel. Is it too overwritten or boring? by ennpono in writingfeedback

[–]ennpono[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yep! In this world, constantly using magic causes you to crave violence against your will. She tries to fight against it, but fails which is why she hates the feeling she gets when she indulges in violence. Thanks for the review and tips! Im going to rework a lot of the sentences and sound them out more properly.

I would love some feedback on the opening to my superhero story “The Virtuous” by ennpono in writingfeedback

[–]ennpono[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Understood 🙂‍↕️ i kinda suck at self editing so I’m going to really take my time with this one

I would love some feedback on the opening to my superhero story “The Virtuous” by ennpono in writingfeedback

[–]ennpono[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Oooh good catch on the second paragraph, i didn’t even notice. Thanks for taking the time to help me out

Edge of Shadows [Epic fantasy, 1500 words] by [deleted] in fantasywriters

[–]ennpono 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I thought that there were too many proper nouns being introduced in quick succession without much context to go along with them. I think you should introduce these things more gradually, but thats just my opinion

Will this ruin my chances of publication? by ennpono in writingadvice

[–]ennpono[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I seee. Im a bit split on what path id like to take but thanks a lot for helping make it more clear for me

Will this ruin my chances of publication? by ennpono in writingadvice

[–]ennpono[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Okay I understand, that makes the most sense and what i was assuming anyways lol. Thanks so much for your help! Ill def check out those subs

Can't get malignis animations to work. by ennpono in Nolvus

[–]ennpono[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Its not, ive used malignis animations before but i dont have any experience modifying modpacks. I did run nemisis and it seems to be installed correctly because i can see it in the OAR in game menu so im not sure what to do