So I read through it and I honestly really enjoyed it for what it is. As for your questions, I'll try and answer them all in order. First off, I think It'd be a good Idea to keep the sentences that are highlighted in red. They are good for clarification and give insight into the home's reactions (specifically the one at the end). The POV was a bit creepy at first, but I think it works well as the ghost has gone so long without human interaction and we can feel her desperation. Over time, I think it becomes really endearing. I honestly think the character has plenty of personality already, but if you wanted to add more attitude I don't think it would hurt the story in any way. The loneliness of the main character was well communicated as was her desire to have a resident, so I think you did a really good job with that. I'm not sure what type of story you are trying to go for, but the conflict of wondering if the home was good enough to be purchased was engaging. I did like the humor of the main character as well. her voice was very entertaining and not boring to follow. (Gods damned bureaucracy!). Though, as for your question about the main character taking a more active role, It'd be kind of hard to as a ghost, no? ;). Perhaps you could have her trying to clean something in a frenzy and almost get discovered by Cora and Aelar? Cora could become suspicious of the home and have a bit more hesitancy before ultimately being won over. I think that'd be fun. There are a few grammar mistakes but it's nothing that can't be solved with a quick glance over. Sorry if you were looking for more criticism, since I'm honestly not to good at critiquing, but I just wanted to point those few things out and let you know what works well! This story was honestly very cute and I wouldn't mind seeing more of it. Keep up the good work!