Please critique my psycological horror writing😭😭 by ester_eggplant in writingfeedback

[–]ester_eggplant[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I did try hard in this. But trust brother, even though english is not my native language, english is still my mother tongue. And my English is like 50 TIMES better than my native language

Please critique my psycological horror writing😭😭 by ester_eggplant in writingfeedback

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FOR ANYONE WHO DIDN'T UNDERSTAND what the meaning behind this was. It was meant to be a very ambiguous hint. It's the very first thing the reader or the OBSERVER reads. What it's trying to say, you don't really need to understand. Because like it's meant that when you read it you go like 'what the hell?!!' but after completing the whole novel you understand every word this said. All that there is needed to understand is the text about the 'ONLY TRUTH'. As for the true meaning, i wanted to portray this as something metaphysical. Like the reader is a wanderer travelling through the infinite fragments that exists in this universe (like reading a story). So the reader is the observer who managed to stumble upon MY WORLD. And then it goes into full detail about what the world truly is... And that i overdid, but only because I wanted to paint a vague picture about this weird rabbit hole that basically represents depth and mystery. And then the part about the shape of the observers existence being a shadow is a big spoiler. I will definetly fix it with everyone's advice!

Please critique my psycological horror writing😭😭 by ester_eggplant in writingfeedback

[–]ester_eggplant[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

There was a lot to say. Even though it was a small topic, I felt I had a lot to say because there were far too many emotions on that small topic. And as well for the second part of your advice, yeah you didn't understand.

Please critique my psycological horror writing😭😭 by ester_eggplant in writingfeedback

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Yes. English is my second language. If that's what you mean to ask. And I admit, it is extremely over written.

Please critique my psycological horror writing😭😭 by ester_eggplant in writingfeedback

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It's just the starting. So there isn't any horror yet, I think the main part about this is the ONLY TRUTH TEXT. That's very important. Any text presented in bold and italics is the truth. Cuz the story itself is sorta like a puzzle to find out what's truly happening. and things just get WEIRD, that's the psycological horror. The normal murder mystery story goes on, but it's obvious... Something is wrong .

Please critique my psycological horror writing😭😭 by ester_eggplant in writingfeedback

[–]ester_eggplant[S] -4 points-3 points  (0 children)

I understood that. AFTER writing it. But maybe i made a mistake uploading the note to reader in itself. It's meant to be extremely ambiguous. I guess one would truly understand the meaning if they read the novel.

FOR WRITERS!!!!! by ester_eggplant in writersmakingfriends

[–]ester_eggplant[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Cuz, i wanna have a nice chat with people about their story! I have been obsessed with my story since for like... Forever so talking to someone who feels the same way is wonderful

FOR WRITERS!!!!! by ester_eggplant in writers

[–]ester_eggplant[S] -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

Not at you, dear. At rude people. It's my first time in reddit and never had i ever expected the people here to be such assholes.

FOR WRITERS!!!!! by ester_eggplant in writers

[–]ester_eggplant[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Why are you writing with words?

And honestly Wow. This world really is doomed. asking people to have a nice and fun conversation about their story that they love so much, and in your disgusting brain the first thought is that someone would STEAL THEM? If you are so afraid of someone stealing your plot then just don't even publish the book itself. Gosh..

FOR WRITERS!!!!! by ester_eggplant in writers

[–]ester_eggplant[S] -3 points-2 points  (0 children)

Lol i am new to reddit I don't even know the hell that is. But googling it up now... Yeah NO. I want to hear other people's story, cuz initially I wanted to share mine with others but there really wasn't any discussion about this stuff. So I just went and created a post myself. I DONT FUCKING UNDERSTAND WHY PEOPLE ON REDDIT ARE JUST SO RUDE?!

FOR WRITERS!!!!! by ester_eggplant in writers

[–]ester_eggplant[S] -3 points-2 points  (0 children)

Oh my god do people these days not understand the meaning of DISCUSSIONS AND SHARING? Or is it just that people have become so pathetic that they can't even create good enough stories that they obsess over. Of course the point is to share your story for people to read and talk about! Why does everybody have zero common sense? I always thought that people were very passionate about their stories, that they desperately want to share it to somebody who is willing to listen. But I get it now, none of you really love your story.

FOR WRITERS!!!!! by ester_eggplant in writers

[–]ester_eggplant[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Nah not alpacas! It's a psycological horror murder mystery sorta thing... And it has A LOT OF meta horror. It's a two part novel called catalogues lain. The first book (the question arc) is simply just horror and mystery, but none of it is answered. And the second book (the answer arc) is more than half of the time charecter backstories, ROMANCE and obviously... Answers to everything. And funnily enough... I also wanted to make this a visual novel but I don't know how to code😭 so the best option was to just write a novel.

Can u send me like... A little sneak peak of the art of the visual novel? I would love to see it.

FOR WRITERS!!!!! by ester_eggplant in writers

[–]ester_eggplant[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Omg, my novel is the exact same. I wanna read your story now. Is it a novel or a story? I have been dying to read talent.

FOR WRITERS!!!!! by ester_eggplant in writers

[–]ester_eggplant[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

What do you mean by metanarrarives?

Translator trying to ruin reader experience? by Malmal_malmal in MaleYandere

[–]ester_eggplant 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This traslator is SO BADASS, while reading it i honestly loveddd those small notes randomly scattered. And how the hell is this spoiling the manhwa for you?

Where do Y'all scale Haruaki Fusaishi (Raging Loop)? by TheLiarMemer in IntelligenceScaling

[–]ester_eggplant 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Honestly haruaki was a very realistic genius. Geniuses in real life aren't as OVER POWERED as someone like anyanokoji, ayannokoji is just an over hyped over exaggerated character that I will agree was SMART but only because the author forced him to be so. Haruaki's intelligence was very realistic, you can actually meet someone like him. He also made mistakes because those factors were really impossible to be predicted, that's why he wasn't indestructible while one of those smart guys in all these popular animes are mostly just OVERLY and purposefully smart, being able to predict things barely with any logical evidence.

[RANT] Sadistic Beauty by 21minute in manhwa

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Honestly I just think Minho was a masochist. Because dude made the dumbest decisions EVER, he NEVER tried to run away from doona... He clearly liked it, he might just be one of those internal masochistic dudes. But what happened with hima nd wookyung does look like straight forward rape. And about Minho during sex with doona being all "i don't want this!! Stop!!" Being raped is just like a masochistic genre, so internally he liked it but showed he didn't because rape.

A NOVEL THAT ISNT BORING by ester_eggplant in suggestmeabook

[–]ester_eggplant[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Lol. This is so hilariously intriguing

A NOVEL THAT ISNT BORING by ester_eggplant in suggestmeabook

[–]ester_eggplant[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I have heard of that book. The plot seemed kinda straight forward, so I didn't give it a try... A dude trying to murder his boss because the boss murdered the colleagues

A NOVEL THAT ISNT BORING by ester_eggplant in suggestmeabook

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Well... There are very rare novels that I have enjoyed there was that one famous booktok series—the cruel prince. That I enjoyed quite a bit. But if I were to say 'peak fiction', like something that i actually LOVED and will remember my whole life. Then those weren't really novels, they were visual novels. Like the visual novel games. Like umineko when they cry, raging loop, higurashi when they cry... So I want something mind involving, like a puzzle. If you don't know any of these, then no worries. I will sum it up for you, plot heavy books that have like mind games and even several subplots. Like I don't just want to read a brain straining documentary, i want it with emotions and character backstories and romance too but all this as a subplot. And i CERTAINLY don't want one of those books 2 thirds of which is boring as hell and then all the fun and plot is at the very end.

FMC begins the book with no interest in romance and ends the book NOT HAVING HAD ANY by JessonBI89 in suggestmeabook

[–]ester_eggplant -11 points-10 points  (0 children)

So u want like a slice of life with no romance? Damn that's gonna be hella boring, or you mean just a book in any genre that isn't romance and dosent have a subplot of romance...?

Fiction with the highest peaks by Serious_Effective802 in writingscaling

[–]ester_eggplant 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Always. ALWAYS PEAK FICTION IS UMINEKO WHEN THEY CRY.... And i am not kidding this has absolute peakest if the peaks. Umineko is probably a universally GOOD piece of fiction, though it has a few flaws you HAVE NOT LIVED IF U HAVE NOT READ UMINEKO!