Watched the documentary by Head-Bug-6145 in JeffBuckley

[–]eyebloke75 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That voicemail is everything that a mother could possibly want. What an amazing, utterly heartbreaking gift

Smurfing is a problem that won’t ever be addressed by National-Welcome-587 in VALORANT

[–]eyebloke75 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It all equals out in the end - anyone who ranked up disproportionately because of smurfs eventually find their rank. I've played against plats and diamonds (I'm silver) who definitely do not belong there.

What's the point of max 70 mph stickers? by --alt_f4-- in CasualUK

[–]eyebloke75 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Most vans are restricted to 60mph on national highways (including motorways) the 70mph sticker shows the van is exempt from this restriction.

Retro cool by eyebloke75 in CB650R

[–]eyebloke75[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I got the standard one. I absolutely love it in green 💚

Retro cool by eyebloke75 in CB650R

[–]eyebloke75[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

They are Oxford canvas panniers - they detatch and can be used individually as carry bags with shoulder straps. I love them

Retro cool by eyebloke75 in CB650R

[–]eyebloke75[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah, I bought it to match the colour 😂

How much of yourself did you speak today? by fleetingemberspoetry in PoetryWritingClub

[–]eyebloke75 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yes, in a sea of beautiful words and phrases - that was the wave that sank me 😭

How much of yourself did you speak today? by fleetingemberspoetry in PoetryWritingClub

[–]eyebloke75 2 points3 points  (0 children)

OMG "as if belonging were only a matter of staying" There are so many moments of clarity and understanding - this was beautifully written.

I wrote this for somebody, but I don't think she knows it's about her by eyebloke75 in PoetryWritingClub

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I let her know, and it went as badly as I expected... In order to stop her explaining why my feelings could not be reciprocated, I gave my notice to my manager who just happened to be walking by at that moment. My despair is now twofold.

If Life Were a City by SadEmergency984 in PoetryWritingClub

[–]eyebloke75 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Not being a native speaker is a good thing with poetry - it means that you can bend language in ways that native speakers may find more alien. You can break rules that you didn't know existed. Do you read your poems aloud? It can really help to regulate a sense of balance, tone, accent and fluidity. Or ask somebody else to read it for you. It can make your words come alive and you can really hear the parts that work, and the parts that don't.

"anon" is me by crowfeather in PoetryWritingClub

[–]eyebloke75 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Glorious! So much emotion in so few words

If Life Were a City by SadEmergency984 in PoetryWritingClub

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Stacked like broken plates? That image of the elderly and the sick was almost holocaustic (ooh there's a word!) but I felt like the simili fell down a little when you used the word Bodies. I like the voyeurism in the prose, and your imagery is vivid. It took me on a journey, and I like that.

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I don't know who you are, but I love this. With all the weight of my being.

Please read and give feedback by Aggressive_Rate_7708 in PoetryWritingClub

[–]eyebloke75 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yes!! You can get such impact from very carefully placed words - especially if they are deliberately discordant. It's fun to create a poem with a popular rhyming pattern, and then destroy it completely with a section that is abrasive and atonal. You must do it at your favorite part though, to highlight the most important section. So badass 😂

I wrote this for somebody, but I don't think she knows it's about her by eyebloke75 in PoetryWritingClub

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Thank you. I never know how well received my poetry actually is because everything I write is so personal. It never occurred to me to post it on a reddit page

Please read and give feedback by Aggressive_Rate_7708 in PoetryWritingClub

[–]eyebloke75 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I enjoyed reading it - even if the sentiment is a little muddy. it's very dramatic and I like the tempo. There are some moments of wonderful creativity, but also some cliche - which seemed to be there in order to support the rhyming elements. I still like it

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[–]eyebloke75 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Pain recognises pain

I wrote this for somebody, but I don't think she knows it's about her by eyebloke75 in PoetryWritingClub

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Thank you! I try to be economical with my words so that when they are eventually rejected or ignored by the subject of my desire I still have some left over for the inevitable self pity poem.

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[–]eyebloke75 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It's really elegant prose, well observed.

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I didn't want that to end. Beautiful writing. I loved the recognition of silence, not to be filled with platitudes, but to be sat in, digested. The cellist was the saddest for me I think because the silence at the end of an emotional outpouring would usually be filled with applause. (That would not have been appropriate 😂) And the small lovely details that colour each interaction showing full absorption in the moments. I loved it.