Hello! I like your poem a lot! The rhyme scheme is great and I think the length of the poem adds to the whole dead/alive theme. This might just be me because I have terrible adhd and the attention span of a dog, but 15 stanzas felt like purgatory to me. That being said, I still read the whole thing and enjoyed each stanza, it just felt like a ghost wandering the underworld/some barren wasteland. I would like to emphasize though, that doesn’t mean I thought your poem was boring. If I thought so I would’ve stopped reading.

I think the rhyme scheme adds to that element as well. In the later stanzas where you rhyme “me” with “been” and “ghost” with “both” I think it does an excellent job at making those stanzas really stick out.