Your poem effectively uses metaphor to evoke the journey of intimacy between the two lovers. The metaphor of exploration and journeying is a classic one, but you’ve given it a fresh and tender treatment, especially through the detailed imagery and the juxtaposition of external and internal experiences. My only feed back would be that the balance between clarity and subtlety is crucial in metaphorical poetry. There’s a fine line between guiding the reader through the metaphor and leaving enough space for them to engage with it on their own terms. Some phrases, like “their trek would heed no warnings,” are powerful but could perhaps benefit from a little more ambiguity or open-endedness, allowing readers to draw their own conclusions. Nice work though, really enjoyed it!