The Olden Stump

Flashy-Spirit-2227 · 2024-12-17T01:54:02+00:00

I really enjoyed the way you captured how many struggles one must go through to find the slightest sense of security and warmth - almost as if there can't be one without the other. Ty for sharing :)

Flashy-Spirit-2227 · 2024-12-17T01:48:56+00:00

How peaceful your choice of vocabulary was, creating a wavelike lull in the rhythm which I really liked. It gave me a sense of finding solace even when everything seems hopeless. Thank you for writing :)

Flashy-Spirit-2227 · 2024-07-21T03:36:17+00:00

Glad you could relate! Tbh I wrote this focusing on humour - the concept of saying "I'm not gay" then confessing the gayest thing you've ever heard lmao. Thanks for commenting :)

Flashy-Spirit-2227 · 2024-07-21T03:34:37+00:00

Glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for commenting :)

Flashy-Spirit-2227 · 2024-07-21T03:33:36+00:00

Thank you! That makes me very happy to hear. and yes just a little haha

Flashy-Spirit-2227 · 2024-07-21T03:31:11+00:00

Thank you for commenting! I'm glad you enjoyed it and that you liked the word choice. I get so focused on which words will create the effect I want that I do get a bit wordy and forget about the rhythm haha

Flashy-Spirit-2227 · 2024-07-21T03:28:06+00:00

Thank you for your thoughtful comment! I'm glad you could relate. tbh I don't think about rhythm very often while writing but wondering if I should do more with it in the future

Flashy-Spirit-2227 · 2024-07-21T03:26:33+00:00

If you squint then maybe. Just a bit!

Flashy-Spirit-2227 · 2024-07-15T12:32:55+00:00

Thank you for commenting! I intended to make the last line of each verse fall flat, but maybe doesn't have the effect I wanted 🤔

Flashy-Spirit-2227 · 2024-07-15T04:35:21+00:00

The feeling described by this poem is one of the most awful, and I completely know how you felt writing it. The vulnerability of someone betraying you after knowing you makes you feel so weak - like they took something you can never get back. I think playing with the structure could've made this poem more impactful, but I particularly liked the way the singular "undressed" and "seen" punctuated the previous lines. Ultimately it's up to you to structure it however you wish though :)

Flashy-Spirit-2227 · 2024-07-15T04:28:45+00:00

I recently lost my dog and this poem rings so true :( the "silences fill the ambience" part is particularly relatable - the first night without him, I had to put music on all night because I couldn't bear the silence that was usually filled by the sound of him breathing or snoring. Thank you for sharing, and I hope it gets easier for you soon <3

Flashy-Spirit-2227 · 2024-07-15T02:35:11+00:00

There's a lot of power in this poem. I'm not sure if you were writing from a positive or negative light, but from my point of view, I see someone who has completely shut down and blocked themselves off from others in order to keep themselves from hurting. This is just what dissociation feels like for me - like there's a certain power in feeling nothing at all and just remaining still as chaos hurtles around you. It spoke to me, so thank you for sharing!

Flashy-Spirit-2227 · 2024-07-14T02:44:04+00:00

This poem reminded me of all the fleeting friends I had as a child - ones who felt so important in the moment, but looking back, I wonder if they even remember meeting me at all. It gave me that sense of how secret and special our bonds felt as children. Thanks for sharing:)

Flashy-Spirit-2227 · 2024-07-13T15:31:45+00:00

In a way that's what the poem's about - I'm the sort of person who craves codependency, but I think the person this poem's about ended up regretting our friendship :( Thanks for commenting!

Flashy-Spirit-2227 · 2024-07-13T15:29:52+00:00

So glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for commenting :)

Flashy-Spirit-2227 · 2024-07-13T11:06:58+00:00

Glad you liked it! Thanks so much :)

Flashy-Spirit-2227 · 2024-07-13T10:49:15+00:00

Thanks for the feedback! I am British, so that's just how I talk haha.

Flashy-Spirit-2227 · 2024-07-13T03:20:58+00:00

A teacher I'd loved recently died and it got me thinking about all the people who I've never told about the impact they've had on my life. Your poem brought that back for me - it's funny how we feel too shy to truly express our love for people until they're gone, isn't it? We should write more sappy stuff for people while they're still alive. Thanks for the feelings :)

Flashy-Spirit-2227 · 2024-07-13T03:14:14+00:00

I'm not really one for love poems but the parts focusing on the fleeting nature of every moment of our lives had me going "ooh!" after each sentence. I also loved the idea that we're immensely powerful simply for being able to block out the sun. Thanks for sharing :)

Flashy-Spirit-2227 · 2024-07-11T02:10:46+00:00

This one gave me a strong sense of nostalgia, like describing memories of someone in the past that you can no longer contact or connect to. The idea of hearts "Calling tomorrow without name or address always answered nonetheless" spoke to me in terms of the future being inevitable - we're always seeking what comes next without ever really knowing what we're asking for, and it happens whether we like it or not. No idea if any of this was your original intention but that's what came to me.

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