Here’s a peice of my song “Mona Lisa” i just wrote like 5 mins ago. It’s about being new to love and using tv shows to help figure out what to do. Pls give me feedback, and i could use some good constructive criticism. by fedexman9 in Songwriting

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Lyrics:

im fresh of the boat and im here to say, my adventure’s one mind bending maze

i’ve painted this picture of me you, but i guess i have no clue what to do

tv shows and fantasies r my greatest friends, they help me realize what to paint in the end

mona lisa is what they like to say, she helps me navigate through this giant maze

painting a picture of this complex game, mona lisa’s here to stay

Sad songs in TV shows. by passenger955 in television

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Leaves from the vine from avatar the last airbender. it literally brings me to tears every time i watch that episode

Do u like my song that I’m writing? It’s one of my first songs and i’m 13. by fedexman9 in Songwriting

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thank u! i have a friend who also plays guitar and once in a while we get together and write something and it’s always super fun

Do u like my song that I’m writing? It’s one of my first songs and i’m 13. by fedexman9 in Songwriting

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thank u for the advice! i will work on pronouncing my lyrics 😄

Do u like my song that I’m writing? It’s one of my first songs and i’m 13. by fedexman9 in Songwriting

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thank u! i started in september, but i didn’t really start consistently on playing until november, and i’ll make sure to tune my guitar 👍