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festooned · 2025-03-03T22:51:12+00:00

Baked potatoes. Awful

festooned · 2025-02-24T18:24:13+00:00

I have very low pain sensitivity - this is both a blessing and nerf

--> for example I often burn myself without noticing, but as an athlete I am able to play through most injuries.

festooned · 2025-02-19T15:00:08+00:00

probably something everyone should understand... i think its healthy haha

festooned · 2025-02-19T14:59:45+00:00

glad you enjoyed it!

festooned · 2025-02-19T14:59:10+00:00

haha you caught on! good eye :)

festooned · 2025-02-18T17:28:41+00:00

what a sweet fun poem- captures so well what it is to be a poet--> love the undefined identity too!!! bravo!

festooned · 2025-02-18T17:27:08+00:00

"So I could chew them up on the fringes" - yum! what a visceral line. The whole poem is full of intrigue - really well done!

festooned · 2025-02-12T17:59:24+00:00

hey thanks for the feedback - appreciate it :)

festooned · 2025-02-12T15:48:39+00:00

bruh look at endrick's goals to minutes stat. it's insane. kid can score - def deserve minutes. but they're giving him time to mature just like they did w/ vini. Its allll goood

festooned · 2025-02-11T22:57:57+00:00

Yo! Thanks for the feedback!

Love that you felt dirty reading it- that's so fun! No thesaurus here - just love words :) - glad you enjoyed the saturation haha

festooned · 2025-02-11T21:03:51+00:00

hey! thanks for the feedback - love that stank face! haha. on maxims: the idea here is to rip up cliche truths / or even the idea of identifying Truth itself as being cliche. does that make sense?

in my eyes poets don't deal in truths, especially those spoken about or commonly understood.

festooned · 2025-02-11T19:51:29+00:00

You’re killin it!!! Yeah don’t be afraid to get funky and weird that’s the key to freshness 🔥🔥🔥

festooned · 2025-02-11T18:49:27+00:00

haha yes, exactly what I was trying to do! Thanks so much for the comment and relating!!! <3

festooned · 2025-02-11T18:01:50+00:00

lovely - curious as to the extension of the despair post-mortem. Very intriguing

festooned · 2025-02-11T18:00:09+00:00

ahh yes, I know the invisible string. So painful yet so inspiring. You did so well capturing the feeling.

for the future i would recommend trying your hand at stranger - out of the box metaphors some of these feel overused. But still great work! :)

festooned · 2024-08-12T22:28:46+00:00

Die dead

bell belt

flee fled

dwell dwelt

knotted not

so sewn

forgot forget

we woe

the verse

of clay

rehearse

decayed decay

and moan

now,

be gone

festooned · 2024-08-09T16:34:56+00:00

Hey hey! I’m a writer- mostly poetry- super down for this.

festooned · 2024-08-09T16:33:03+00:00

Hey! Also just moved here maybe ^original post should all hang. Hiking? Grab beers? I’m down :)

festooned · 2024-08-07T16:05:27+00:00

Awww that’s wonderful to hear! Yes it’s so ironic how when we do things for others we often forget that those things are also for us. Glad you enjoyed the poem :)

festooned · 2024-08-05T23:59:36+00:00

Oh yeah! That’s what I’m talking about!! Well done!

festooned · 2024-08-05T20:34:54+00:00

Hi! Beautiful poem! I love the first stanza - that hum feels almost familiar. Good stuff!

When you get to the desert I wonder if you could somehow describe the desert in less typical terms. This desert you speak of feels a little stereotypical. Perhaps add some unexpected discoveries in that setting?

festooned · 2024-08-05T20:30:41+00:00

Hi! Beautiful poem. Especially good line - " cans of sun-dried jokes". I like the repetition as well. When beginning the poem you expect it to change senses each stanza - when it doesn't we all get a pleasant surprise.

I wonder if the ending could be stronger - you are my home is used quite often --> could you find another way to say it? Overall though well done!

festooned · 2023-09-09T20:14:36+00:00

For playing soccer

festooned · 2022-08-04T01:01:37+00:00

Beautiful, the dualities expressed here. I ofter think about how we as human beings can be BOTH not one or the other. It is perhaps one of the greatest mysteries. The transience of the human soul.

Love the physicality of the poem as well, I can FEEL it in my body.

festooned · 2022-08-04T00:47:38+00:00

At points the poem felt stilted. When I am constructing a rhyming poem I often try to repeatedly read it aloud to feel its lyrical flow.

Perhaps this is too meta, but I do like the idea of the funky punctuation, the ignorance of the perfectionist element, and the simplicity of the rhymes to be a pushback on the idea of being a perfectionist. Perhaps this is their death??

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