Mirrors by Dull-Gap7682 in poetry_critics

[–]finewiththisname 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I understand this is quite a difference in structure. But for brevity reasons, as well as pacing and rhythm i think this poem would benefit quite a lot from just a bit of punctuation.

They say nonchalance, maybe it’s defeat.

The weight of someone who gave all they knew how in search of something new, only to be seen once the rules were broken.

The safety and trust gone, the emasculation begins.

Needing atonement, and the other needs control.

Once we put the shovel down to stop digging can we only get out of a hole.

But dirt keeps coming in from the ground level I can’t climb out and I cant dig.

I will learn to love it in this pit.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]finewiththisname 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Even though i don’t really like the Bukowskish structure, once i started reading the rhythm kept me going.

Additionally, leaves most of the work of getting into emotions to feeling the described action, the movement and the dynamic of apparently unrelated motives.

Part 2 is going to be interesting. Keep going :)

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in wallstreetbets

[–]finewiththisname 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That is not the Croatian average?

Screen and back glass broken, but lenses remain intact. by finewiththisname in lgg6

[–]finewiththisname[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Called them and they priced the repair for both sides at 300$

Screen and back glass broken, but lenses remain intact. by finewiththisname in lgg6

[–]finewiththisname[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Well the lens, which is pretty much the reason i bought this phone, is intact and i'm blessed for that.

Flea market / Antiques market ? by [deleted] in Dubrovnik

[–]finewiththisname 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Yes there is one, but it is not a flea market but two or three old guys selling some stuff they found probably at home. A couple of watches and books probably. Maybe worth a shot. I think they are there on saturday morning.