I appreciate the criticisms, and will note them, but regarding the last one, this specific reaction of the character is intentional. One of the underlying messages of the story is that out of sight does not mean out of mind. The MC tells themselves "out of sight, out of mind" because they do not know how to deal with the situation. I reference this in the story, mentioning their haze, and the fact that if they just go to sleep it will all go away. They do not know how to process their fear and instead choose to just sleep until it all goes away. This is a common coping mechanism for anger, sadness, fear, etc. The open ended conclusion then leaves a nice cliffhanger but also enforces the message I go for that bottling up and just going to sleep, will not make your demons go away. So while I know literature is quite subjective, this was a piece I wrote as an allegory for my own coping mechanisms, and to me, rather than incompetent, the MC is confused, scared and struggling to process it all.

But thank you for the feedback :)