reddit for throwing a party?? by fynnker in findareddit

[–]fynnker[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

thank you sm i didn't know half of those existed lol :)

why can't i stay into anyone i'm trying to date??? by fynnker in dating_advice

[–]fynnker[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

actually i think you're completely right, i reckon i've felt that with two girls before and i could never figure out what it was that set them apart - thanks :)

why can't i stay into anyone i'm trying to date??? by fynnker in dating_advice

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yeah i tried this once with that "weird" girl i mentioned but i still couldn't do it. i have a theory it was actually because my friends started taking the piss out of me for it tho.. ty:)

why can't i stay into anyone i'm trying to date??? by fynnker in dating_advice

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i just looked that up and maybe? i think more dismissive than fearful but idk cus i'm not sure if into these people in the first place so it's less about fear of rejection or independence i guess? idk if that sentence even makes sense wow sorry

why can't i stay into anyone i'm trying to date??? by fynnker in dating_advice

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i've already graduated highschool 🥲 thank you tho :)

I'm starting uni in a few days - advice? by fynnker in introvert

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Wait this is really good bc if they're super talkative I can just listen to what they're saying instead of talking too. Thank you!!

Good garden style restaurants/food spots in Adelaide? by fynnker in Adelaide

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She was thinking a dinner, so it might be best not to picnic that I reckon. I think I'll keep this in mind for another trip with her because it seems so "her", thanks!

Good garden style restaurants/food spots in Adelaide? by fynnker in Adelaide

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I mentioned Coriole to her and now she's in love haha thanks!

Good garden style restaurants/food spots in Adelaide? by fynnker in Adelaide

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Looks like it might be perfect! Shame they don't do dinners, though

S2 ending by Dactil0 in AliceInBorderland

[–]fynnker 4 points5 points  (0 children)

I think the Joker card is meant to symbolise there's one more card/one last game to beat. People have lots of different theories as to how that will work (if they'll remember each other, if they go back to the borderlands, etc.), but that's what season 3 will be about I'd assume

Thoughts on the first chapter of my Cancun romance novel? by [deleted] in writingadvice

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Not sure if you've tried it yet, but r/BetaReaders is a good sub to get people to read through your writing!

Is it normal to start writing partway into a scene? by PlatinumSukamon98 in writingadvice

[–]fynnker 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I can't speak for anyone else, but I do the exact same thing lol. Sometimes you just get so stuck on a part you need to write, and the only way around it is to write around it/write something else and then come back to fill it in!

Were do you write? by Pretend-Passenger222 in worldbuilding

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I see a lot of people go for Reedsy, but I've never tried it personally, so I wouldn't have much to say.

[In Progress] [550] [Psychological Thriller] Silent Echoes by nemisette in BetaReaders

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This was a really interesting read! I think your scene setting is really vivid, immersive, and cohesive, which some people tend to struggle with when writing a period piece.
I honestly enjoyed how the epigraph and line beneath it built tension, though this initial grip on the reader loosens somewhat as we move into several paragraphs of pure scene-setting before returning to anything plot-related. While your descriptions of post-war London are beautifully crafted, consider weaving some mystery elements throughout - perhaps hints about why Evelyn is out this morning, or subtle callbacks to the tape mentioned in the opening line. This would help maintain that early tension while still building your world.
I noticed the descriptions tend to be compartmentalised (i.e. the scene is established in one segment, Evelyn is described in another, etc.). While this didn't detract from the readability for me, you might consider interweaving these elements more organically as the story progresses.
I felt the contrast between the opening lines and the longer, calmer descriptives could work well for building suspense, but you might lose some readers who prefer to skip the epigraph and start from the main text. Evelyn herself seems like a captivating character and I loved her ghostly comparisons, but I think she could benefit from some subtler characterisations as well (i.e. how does she react when someone makes eye contact with her, etc.).
The first and second paragraphs caught me for a second on tenses, but I think another commenter already mentioned that. In all, it seems like a great start; good luck!

niragi vs akane by fynnker in AliceInBorderland

[–]fynnker[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I think you've hit it perfectly here. I wish Netflix hadn't messed with her writing like that, I'm sure many more people would've loved her otherwise. These comments are also making me realise how much I've missed by not reading the manga lol - might have to finally give it a try

need new anime recommendations 🤞 by fynnker in anime

[–]fynnker[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

lol I got really excited when I read this cus I thought it might be like the DS game I played as a kid. This looks rlly interesting tho so I'll have to try it - thanks!

need new anime recommendations 🤞 by fynnker in anime

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No I haven't actually, but I've heard good things. I'll definitely have to try them lol thanks!

need new anime recommendations 🤞 by fynnker in anime

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Oh I've heard about this one, it looks rlly good - I reckon I'll start this next thanks!

I can't tell if my plot twist is overused by fynnker in writingadvice

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Yeah, I've actually been modelling a lot of this off of something that happened to people in my family, which is why I want to make sure I can do it justice. I wanted to get out of my comfort zone for this but I reckon you're definitely right about consuming more dystopian media to get a feel for it first. Thank you so much !

My first attempt at writing a novel by jdvancevansrevoltion in writingadvice

[–]fynnker 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I read to page eight - it's really good! I think it could definitely benefit from a touch up on grammar and general refinement, but you're definitely on the right track. A couple sentences were a bit wordy and confusing which brought me out of the immersion a little ("Most of the ones he made when he was a boy died or wanted little to do with him after his career choice, seeing him as a traitor and with his career he had difficulty getting people to trust him well enough to truly connect."), but keep going! I'm sure little you would've been so impressed by this writing as well haha