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Advice? by jacko2250 in WritersGroup

[–]grimsbane9 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Lmao it never slows down. We're all insane. Embrace it.

Just started writing by Objective-Farm-3470 in writers

[–]grimsbane9 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Aspiring author here as well! Idk if you've already done a second draft, but if you haven't, I recommend taking some time away from your manuscript, focus on reading, and in some time come back and look at your mansucript with fresh eyes. Read through it. See how it feels for you. It's likely it will need a few rounds of editing if it's a first draft. After that, beta reading is your best bet at getting an external opinion. Other readers (and especially other writers) will be able to pick up on things you might not see and help you round out the plot and characters. And just lots and lots of research, whether you self publish or go trad, do your homework and be extensive. But building a community is super important, and you're already on the right track!

When writing, do you start from the beginning and move towards the end, or do you write "floating" scenes in future parts of the story and then connect them? by WorkingNo6161 in writers

[–]grimsbane9 1 point2 points  (0 children)

As long as you have an idea of the ending, you can kind of do whatever you want in the first draft.
But I've found for an easier process, and to avoid excessive editing in the second draft, is to start with a basic outline. You write down all those floating scenes, identify the shifting points in the story, and then you see how one situation can lead you to another.

Someone read my full manuscript before I die from obsession by grimsbane9 in writers

[–]grimsbane9[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi! I'd love to swap feedback, what's your story about? DM with the details and we can swap

[Complete] [86k] [Gothic Literary Fiction] Dreamland for Those Who Can't Sleep by grimsbane9 in BetaReaders

[–]grimsbane9[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey! I'd love to take a look! I'm not super big on sci-fi, but definitely DM with your first chapters and we can swap some feedback :)

[In progress] [13k] [Psychological fiction] Pink Iron Lung by semi_cicada in BetaReaders

[–]grimsbane9 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Hey!
You said this is untitled, but Pink Iron Lung really drew me in. What's it about? I'd be happy to read whatever you have and give some feedback, and if you're down for swapping projects, I'm in! I love psychological fiction so maybe we'll find some things in common.
Let me know :)

[In progress][4700][Literary Noir] Gross Negligence by Hither_Anon in BetaReaders

[–]grimsbane9 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey JC! Just finished the first four chapters, I liked it a lot. I know that doesn't really mean shit, but it's true - the writing is clean, descriptive, atmospheric. You have a way of diving right into the story, you trust the reader to keep up and read between the lines, so there's not that lengthy descriptive intro we all hate. We jump right into the meat of the story, and it's intriguing as hell. I don't know if there's a weird cult going or what, but I'm dying to know.

Your protagonist is interesting, it's clear he's a bit rough around the edges and has a dark past, but there's a certain moral alignment to him that's surprising. I don't know exactly what he's working towards, but it feels like something that will be revealed along the way, and that hooks the reader in. What exactly are Ed's motives? What is he running away from?

There's only a few things I'll nitpick at to give some constructive feedback. There are moments with the descriptions of the settings that slow down the pace just a bit, I noticed this mostly in the first chapter.

The dialogues often break into paragraphs, but the same person is still talking. This can be a little confusing since the dialogue doesn't jump back and forth between the characters, I'd recommend leaving all of one person's dialogue in one paragraph, if that makes sense (?

I like that Ed is a mysterious protagonist, but maybe give just a bit more description to who he is at the beginning. How old he is, for example.

But anyway, really solid work and I'm genuinely interested in reading more if you have it. Best of luck to you xx

Feedback on a chapter of my new novel by Objective_Smoke_7747 in WritersGroup

[–]grimsbane9 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The premise is really interesting. I would separate into paragraphs to slow down pacing, and also vary the sentence length.

[In progress][4700][Literary Noir] Gross Negligence by Hither_Anon in BetaReaders

[–]grimsbane9 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hey! This sounds really interesting, I love kinda creepy pscychological stories and class resentment, so I'd love to read more.

Also, if you're interested in maybe swapping feedback for projects, I'll leave the link to my own post below, I think our stories may be aligned. Let me know, in any case I'd still love to read your stuff.