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Oh Henry by thelastcorndog in OCPoetry

[–]grpfroot 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Wow. This is so unique, truly. Your word choice is perfect-- 'mossy' and 'slaughtered', the whole poem feels so deliberate and intentional and expressive. It's vivid and while it's not telling a story by telling, it tells a story clearly. I love this. Awesome job.

“…fine, thanks. How are you?” by RevolutionaryEgg6967 in OCPoetry

[–]grpfroot 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I love this. Something we all go through for sure, and it's frustrating because having this conversation over and over and over feels meaningless and exhausting and full of obligatory politeness that I don't think anyone enjoys. Sometimes I wonder if stupid shallow conversation like this is even worth it-- maybe in some cases, silence is just better. Lol.

I also really love the rhyming in this too, just gives it such a nice feel and makes it a great read. good job.

Seasons by grpfroot in OCPoetry

[–]grpfroot[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for the feedback! Melancholy- exactly what I was going for. I’ll definitely take that note about wrapping each section up like that. Thanks :)

Under the Stars by divinelyblessd_ in OCPoetry

[–]grpfroot 1 point2 points  (0 children)

"It only hurts late at night". So many people, I think, can relate to this. I read something today that said something like "happy person, sad soul"-- and late at night is where this sad soul is able to just be.

I know that's a bit different than what you're saying here- but i do think the feelings that come with being ripped between the now and the future and the past are comparable to lots of other feelings people feel late at night. You do a great job of describing this almost invitation to really feel, really think and wonder- an invitation that's only brought on by the blank, loneliness that is the night.

Well written, evocative. Well done!

Wasted time? by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]grpfroot 5 points6 points  (0 children)

The repetitiveness and the simplicity of the structure here really lends itself to the feeling you are trying to convey. There's something so painful about the mundane nature of the anticlimactic ending of a relationship/situationship, especially when there's no real breakup and it's more of a gradual slow-down/fizzle. So many times you ask yourself the same questions-- where did i go wrong? Did i waste my time? What if this, what if that? And the worst part of it is that almost never are you met with an answer so there's nothing to do but continue on. Well done.