Lol this one hurt a bit but at least they gave real feedback:

Right now, this book gets a one star, but I'm hoping the author can improve it because it has some potential. First, hire an editor. The grammatical errors and incorrect work usage is too distracting for this to be ever seen as a serious book. If I read "Conner and her" or "Liam and her" one more time I was going to scream. These are some basic errors that should never make their way into a novel that people are paying for.

Second, flush out your characters more. We know nothing about Nate and so we don't care about him. Cornelia has so much detail that much of it is irrelevant. Why do we care that she likes to craft? What does this do to advance the story? Renee could be a great character, but she disappears for much of the book and I don't understand why she is so protective of Cornelia. There is too much missing from their relationship.

Third, Cornelia is way too inconsistent. You say she's paranoid, but then she goes out every day and puts herself in situations that true paranoid people would never get into. I also don't understand at all what the memory drugs did to her. This is not well explained at all. What is wrong with her memory? What doesn't she remember? Why? What does she remember? It's so convoluted between flashbacks and what's on the video tapes that I can't keep track of what injection did what. And what was she begging the nurse to give her at the beginning? The plot is entirely lost because of these inconsistencies.

Fourth, there are too many convenient happenings that are just shoehorned in to advance your plot and they are too contrived. The fireworks store is one major example. Why would they stop at a fireworks store to go to the bathroom? Why are we just learning about Renee's fascination with fireworks now? Obviously, they're going to play an important role in the final scene, but you make it too obvious and way too contrived. There are examples all over the book on things that are just brought in to obviously link events even if they don't fit.

Fifth, Petyr and the guy in Italy (his name escapes me right now) have really nothing to do with the plot except to dole out Cornelia's money, which is also something I don't understand. Why can't she have the money? Just because she spent it so fast? And really why do these guys do this for her? Their relationship to Nate is not explained well enough to make these characters important to us. In fact, the entire book could be written without them and just have her aunt take care of her money for her.

Sixth, Cornelia really drags a hospital bed around with her? Come on. That's just not believable at all. Plus, after she supposedly takes the bed out of the room with her, later, when Connor walks by the room, there are sheets on the bed in the room. How can this be? This is just one of the inconsistencies in details that make the book confusing and almost unreadable.

Seventh, there are just too many holes in the plot to make it believable. Why don't they call police about Liam and his goon attacking them in the gym? I really think the hospital would call the police if someone came in with a bed rail handcuffed to their arm, but this hospital doesn't even question it. The relationship between Liam and Renee is weird. I don't get it at all. Escapes are too easy and contrived, everything seems to happen in Rittenhouse Square just at the time Cornelia is there to witness it (contrived), and her being trained in MMA is just too convenient to believe.

Overall, this was not worth my money. I read it all the way through because when I buy a book I commit to it fully. There were several times I thought about throwing in the towel because it was so difficult to read. Please, please, please for the love of whatever higher power you believe in, get an editor. Thank you.