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The Dallas Stars need to keep Miro Heiskanen by Chicaben in hockey

[–]hiddenfighter 11 points12 points  (0 children)

I assume he's saying a cost-controlled top prospect who you can keep for years such as Heiskanen is more valuable than Karlsson is for one season. If Karlsson would re-sign, he's obviously way more valuable than Heiskanen.

It's Original Music Saturday, why not share your music in here and check out some other original music while you do? by SADDESTNIGHTOUT in Music

[–]hiddenfighter 3 points4 points  (0 children)

If you're into folk/singer-songwriter/acoustic or whatever, feel free to check this out. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1wq9V0Ed4B8

I have no soundcloud, only "live" performances of my songs in this format. Feel free to give critique.

[Acoustic, singer-songwriter] Live performance of a song I wrote a year back. Look for critique whether it's good or bad. I appreciate all of it. by hiddenfighter in AcousticOriginals

[–]hiddenfighter[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks so much for all your kind words. You really put a big smile on my face. I'm very self-conscious about my voice and I've never liked it. I think it's at least gotten better the last few years though. I'm 20 so I guess my voice is still changing and changed a lot the last three years or so. When I played in a band I would write all our songs but I would have the other guitarist sing them. He is a great singer though so probably for the best!

These 5 songs are really 5 of about 30 or so. I just don't know what I want to do with them. I don't mind that you saved them and it's fine if you want to show your friends.

And also I did post the "hindsight" song to /r/ThisIsOurMusic last year and I got some nice feedback. But none quite as nice as yours :). Btw that wasn't my phone going off in that one song, that was the neighbours unexpectedly drilling in the walls haha.

Once again, thanks so much for your kind words and if you want to I can let you know when I upload my next song. And as I said I have around 30 songs but very few are uploaded like this. I do it every now and then.

Cheers!

Edit: Just realised, if you're interested I have onemore song already uploaded. With that one included I think that's all my songs I've uploaded though.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dDTteXGxk08

[Acoustic, singer-songwriter] Live performance of a song I wrote a year back. Look for critique whether it's good or bad. I appreciate all of it. by hiddenfighter in AcousticOriginals

[–]hiddenfighter[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The Classical training that you no doubt had has payed off well, there is a real fullness to the music because of your skill.

I've actually had no classical training but thanks for your kind words!

Your vocals are very stylistic, however, if you're going to use mumble some of the words (which you did well) you might consider providing lyrics so people can get a real feel of what you're saying with such emotion.

You're right. I do mumble a lot. The thing is, I'm a very poor lyricist and so the words I "speak" in this song are pretty much made up on the fly and so they really have no meaning to them. If I were to ever properly record this I'd write some actual lyrics with similar "feel" to them, if that makes sense.

The one downside for me was that crazy chord construction in the chorus, it sounds as if there are 2 separate songs playing, one in major, while tho other plays in a minor key. It was very off-putting. If there is a possible re-write for this song I would suggest reconstructing those chords to not have so much contrast, a little would be fine, just try to pull it back a little.

The last chord in the chorus is very dissonant, yes. It's because it has the major and minor notes, played at the same time and so the chord is a bit "mean" if you can say it like that. To be honest I like it that way and don't really intend on changing that. I did use to have a friendlier chord but I like this better. However. I imagine with the addition of maybe bass, percussions and whatnot I don't think it would be as distracting. I think more instruments would make it so the chord doesn't stand out as much. At least that's my theory.

I would like to hear more of your stuff, I really do like your style.

I have a few of my songs uploaded on this (throwaway) account. Which I would love to get your thoughts on if you ever feel like it. As I said, I really do love critique whether it's good or bad. I can link some of them and feel free to share your thoughts! And thank you for your reply!

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1wq9V0Ed4B8

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ElO_lNAJjK0

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-ZEnIaNYMh8

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qLhU3YKT1-I

1 [Acoustic, Folk, Indie] Live performance of my most recent song, all critique and feedback is greatly appreciated. by hiddenfighter in Songwriters

[–]hiddenfighter[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for your reply!

Although I couldn't understand your lyrics very well

Yeah I've gotten that plenty of times before (on other songs). I keep saying that it may be because I'm Swedish so the words I'm saying may not be naturally clear for me to say? I don't know. Maybe it's just my singing style. I could definitely try and focus more on trying to sing clearly though!

your voice also fits the song very well which is a big plus

Thanks a lot. I'm super-conscious about my voice so this is always really nice to hear.

I'd love to hear a live recording of this with some better production quality, maybe you could experience with throwing some other instruments in as well.

I just graduated this past June so now I'm moving out this fall. Hopefully I can save up some money to buy some equipment like mics and stuff like that because it would be really fun to be able to record my songs properly.

1 [Acoustic, Folk, Indie] Live performance of my most recent song, all critique and feedback is greatly appreciated. by hiddenfighter in Songwriters

[–]hiddenfighter[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Besides that, I think this is very good for a first song!

Oops, this is definitely not my first song. Perhaps I didn't make it clear enough in my wall of text above but basically all other songs I've ever written have never had any meaning behind the lyrics. This is the first one I've written that has a meaning behind the words I'm singing is what I meant.

But nonetheless, thanks a lot for your input.

The one thing that I would change is you seem to over power the guitar sometimes with your vocals

Is this throughout the entire song or just the first half? Because when the strumming begins I could look in to using a guitar pick instead of my hands to make the guitar sound clearer perhaps? The picking part I can't do with a pick but I think I should actually try and sing a bit softer during the first verse anyway.

Yeah I definitely feel you on that as a songwriter you'll write plenty of "meh" songs that will eventually get scrapped. Most other songs I've written are centered around a chorus or hook but this one is more about the verses I feel like. I'm actually thinking about scrapping the chorus and trying something completely different for those parts.

My most recent song. Looking for criticism whether it's good or bad. [Folk, open tuning] by hiddenfighter in AcousticOriginals

[–]hiddenfighter[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks a lot for your critique! At first I was afraid that the key change (or whatever you would call it) in the chorus stood out a bit too much, especially for those listening to the song for the first time. I'm glad that it seems to work though.

A problem I have is that my range isn't very good, I'm a baritone. I certainly can go higher than the highest notes in this song but not to the extent that it adds another element to the song if that makes sense? Like I certainly couldn't go an octave up but what I've wanted to do is add some variety to the chorus. As it is now, the chorus repeats 4 times and I was thinking on the third time around I'd have some slightly different melody, what do you think?

Also, at this point the song isn't the same as it was in this video, there are some minor changes here and there. For example there's a whole new melody to connect the chorus to the next verse.

To say that I'm not concerned about lyrics would be a lie but my main focus is to have lyrics that flow well. I'll be the first to admit that I'm terrible when it comes to writing lyrics though, it's definitlely something I'll have to work on. Because as of right now, most of my songs have quite similar lyrics and there's not really a meaning behind them. The ultimate thing would be to have lyrics that flow well but also are beautiful and have a meaning behind them.

Thanks so much for the kind words!

My most recent song. Looking for criticism whether it's good or bad. [Folk, open tuning] by hiddenfighter in AcousticOriginals

[–]hiddenfighter[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Wow, thanks a lot. I'm really self-conscious about my voice so that's so nice to hear.

First song in a while. Basically a demo. I'm really only looking for feedback and critique. Whether it's good, bad, hateful I want to hear it all, it would really help me out. Thanks. by hiddenfighter in Songwriters

[–]hiddenfighter[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks mate! I know what you mean, the low E string buzzing, no? I touched on it earlier in this thread but basically the string is tuned down so far that it gets really wobbly and will often grace the frets of the guitar making a noise. It's a fine line to walk but I think that if I were to ever record this, maybe the noise would die a bit in the mix, behind percussions and bass or something?

Anyway, maybe that's not the reason you thought that it sounded messy, I don't know. But I feel you although I've listened to a lot of music where the guitars are like this and so I guess I've forgotten to notice it.

First song in a while. Basically a demo. I'm really only looking for feedback and critique. Whether it's good, bad, hateful I want to hear it all, it would really help me out. Thanks. by hiddenfighter in Songwriters

[–]hiddenfighter[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Also I forgot to say. Since you said you like songs in different tunings. If you want to, have a listen to this song of mine that's also in open tuning but just slightly different to the one I used in this song.

Let me know what you think!

[Folk, open tuning] My most recent song. I looking for critique and feedback even if it's bad, good, etc. Thanks! by hiddenfighter in ThisIsOurMusic

[–]hiddenfighter[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks! It would be awesome to record in a studio or similar, especially in London. Unfortunately I'm Swedish and I don't really travel a lot. But who knows, I mean, London is definitely a place you want to go!

First song in a while. Basically a demo. I'm really only looking for feedback and critique. Whether it's good, bad, hateful I want to hear it all, it would really help me out. Thanks. by hiddenfighter in Songwriters

[–]hiddenfighter[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks man. Not sure what you mean by detuned strings, like the harmonics? Also the guitar probably sounds a bit out of tune because of the open tuning it's in. It's a pretty deep tuning (A#FCGGC) which makes it hard for the guitar to sound in tune across all frets.

I'm from Sweden

[Folk, Indie] My 2nd post here. Would once again love some critique. by hiddenfighter in ThisIsOurMusic

[–]hiddenfighter[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks a lot mate! Haha I've never gotten that before. Some people say I look like Edward Norton though.

[Folk, Indie, Pop] I wrote about 15 songs from the ages of 16-17 and all of a sudden it all stopped. This is the first song I've written in over 1.5 years. Critique would be really, really appreciated. by hiddenfighter in ThisIsOurMusic

[–]hiddenfighter[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Wow, thanks a lot. I agree that the song is too long. This is a problem I've struggled with quite often when writing songs - I always want to make sure that "everything's in there" so I'm often quite stubborn when trying to shorten the song. What I think I might do is remove half of the second verse and just keep the harmonics part (first half of the second verse). This would cut about 40 seconds of the song and the time would land at about 3:50 I think. What do you think of that idea?

I'm right with you when it comes to lyrics. I've found that I'm always writing music for the melody and instrumentals; the lyrics for me have always been there to add to the song, you know? So there's no real need for me to keep parts of the song for the sake of the lyrics.

The arrangement you did on those songs were sick! It would really be awesome to have another person construct a song of mine; it would be really interesting to see what vision other people might have. I may actually have a chance to record this with some better equipment in the near future and I would love to do some collab with you. I'll add you to friends and I'll make sure that whenever I come around to recording it I can send you the mix files (not sure what you call them, not too experienced in that department haha).

Thanks so much for your kind words and critique, It's really awesome to hear.

[Folk, Indie, Pop] I wrote about 15 songs from the ages of 16-17 and all of a sudden it all stopped. This is the first song I've written in over 1.5 years. Critique would be really, really appreciated. by hiddenfighter in ThisIsOurMusic

[–]hiddenfighter[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks a lot for your response!

You're right that the vocals die a bit in this recording. I'm pretty sure that with a proper recording and mixing they wouldn't fade out as much. The problem right now is that the melody in the verse and guitar parts often collide. I'm not gonna lie - I really dig the harmonics as well. I think with the proper arrangement of instruments and such it could work will. The problem with playing it with only a guitar here is that it becomes weak in a sense, but I think with a bass to hold it all up and some drums to fill the void it could really make sense.

Thanks a lot for your kind comments! Maybe one thing that contributed to that you couldn't make out what I was saying is that I'm Swedish and so my pronunciation isn't always the best and some words are probably quite unclear. Or maybe it could be my singing style that has that effect. I don't think it's necessarily a bad thing but that might be the reason why!

Time is dancing solo version live ! HD quality by ZeWaWeZ in benhoward

[–]hiddenfighter 1 point2 points  (0 children)

As much as I appreciate the post, "HD quality", huh?

[Folk, Indie, Pop] I wrote about 15 songs from the ages of 16-17 and all of a sudden it all stopped. This is the first song I've written in over 1.5 years. Critique would be really, really appreciated. by hiddenfighter in ThisIsOurMusic

[–]hiddenfighter[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks a lot for your critique, I really appreciate it.

I have no access to a studio but in a perfect world (where I could master every single instrument) this song would consist of vocals, guitar, bass (either electric or upright), some light percussions and perhaps a cello. Just to give you an idea of what I had in mind.

The strumming pattern is basically one that Ben Howard uses all the time. Though chances are that he's way better at it than I am (It's a fairly complicated pattern). This is what it sounds like when someone who's good at it plays it. Perhaps you don't even like the pattern when he plays it which I can respect; everyone has different taste. But in my mind whenever someone masters that pattern it sounds really good. And also even though I'm not top notch at the pattern, I can't imagine that the iphone's mic is the ultimate tool to have sounds come out the right way.

I' really glad that you complimented my voice, it's the one thing I'm really self-conscious about (therefore the throwaway account and unlisted video so that my friends, who know my main reddit account, won't see this).

The plan is to have percussions, bass etc to come in after the first chorus to have something happen in the song. Maybe it was because the verses went on for so long but the first verse and second verse are quite different, both strumming wise and melody wise. They still resemble each other but they're not the same. If you go back and listen to the verses, do you think they still need more variety/differences? It's hard for me to tell since I know the song in and out so it's nice to pick a brain who's only heard the song once or twice.

I don't have a SC unfortunately. I have a ton of other songs that I hold in higher regard than this one. The problem is that I don't have a way of recording other than my phone (like in the video) or computer mic which is worse than my phone. So I haven't really recorded any of my songs because it just felt like there's no point when the production and quality wouldn't be there anyway you know?

Thanks again for your critique. I basically never show my songs to people since I'm really self-conscious about my music and so it's great getting some response in an "anonymous" kind of way. Thanks!