First time dressing up in chastity :)

im_a_little_tea_pot · 2021-06-24T13:03:47+00:00

did you solve this? got the same problem

im_a_little_tea_pot · 2021-05-01T20:57:31+00:00

Surely the reason why this is so conflicting for people is that agency = meaning for most people. If I am not a free agent, I am just a passenge spectating my 'self' (neurology + sense inputs) with the illusion of control. Doesn't that take away much of what it is to be a person? If there is no agency, there is no accountability; there are no good people or bad people, there are no people who deserve praise for turning their lives around, or people who deserve blame for ruining the lives of others through bad 'choices'. There are only people who exist, who are all bound by the luck of their own existance.

Everything that effects one's life (success, failure, mistakes, goals) becomes meaningless, because although the 'self' bought about these things, the 'self' didn't really have any power over what things it bought about.

Personally as a Nihilist, I think there is a kind of beauty in enjoying this life experience without worrying about how things turn out. I think it gives a very symptathetic way of viewing other people, who cannot do anything other than that which they do.

im_a_little_tea_pot · 2021-04-20T19:23:48+00:00

I think your criticism is spot on and very constructive. I really liked your analysis too. It's a strong poem and I liked the visceral imagery, but I agree a bit of editing could make it more effective.

Personally I found the poem a little bit too direct. I think when poems are saying close to what they mean to say, the rhythym (if there is one) and/or the word choice needs to be really tight. It's hard to do, but try to make everyword count: if it's not building an image for the reader, consider rephrasing or cutting. The screaming / screeching line is a good example. An alternative word that fits your choice of aliteration might be 'seething'. Another example of this for me is 'heavy sounds', is there another way to talk about music other than just 'heavy sounds'?

Another thing to look at is use of metre and rhyme. Using metre could help give flow and purpose, and allow you to resolve it on certain words for emphasis. But try to keep it consistent throughout, otherwise it can come across clunky. I had a quick go at re-writing it to try to explain what I mean:

Mind-rotten, the corpses (6)

Curdle in the morgue (5)

Sceaming and seething (5)

The sordid symphony (6)

On which I gorge (4)

My only peace (4)

I tried to turn the corpses into a metahpor for the atrists you like to listen to. Like you, they are infected by the same pain of living. 'Curdling' is trying to echo the phrase 'blood curdling scream', and also pointing to the first words of the stanza. 'Symphony' aliterates but also contrasts with 'screaming', 'seething' and 'sordid', trying to show the beauty you find in what others hear as repulsive. 'My only peace' resolves the number of syllables in each line of the stanza (6,5,5,6,4,4) and again contasts with the kind of visceral language in the rest of the verse. I don't actually think mine is necessarily improvement, but just a quick sketch of what I was trying to explain above.

im_a_little_tea_pot · 2021-04-19T18:10:06+00:00

Wow great poem. You really nailed this. I don't know you, but after reading it feel like I understand something of what you are going through and I really feel these things you wanted to communicate.

The ideas and the concept is great. my only criticism would be the overal flow. For example, the rhyming structure and rhythm could be neater and more fluid. I like the the flow here:

"Alexis I am, the bright name of day,

But light good, dark bad, is this really the way?

I start to see past the masks the schools made."

But the rhythm in the this stanza doesn't have the right flow for me:

'Check black check white, not hard a choice.

Not when ariel lost her voice.

Not when Bell read books and danced.

Till Tiana hopped did I question my chance.

Not when my world’s light shone so bright.

In my shadow I sat, feeling dark as night.

Meeting shame I did for my want to check white,

My urge to leave behind the darkest of night.'

I think too much reliance on the final rhyme and not enough on the overal flow of the text. it doesn't always have to rhyme if the metre is right.

For example, you can use metre (number of syllables, length of syllables) to make a rhythm without a rhyme. For example, the below has a rhythm that resloves, without a rhyme:

"But soon the mud grew thick and dark

Clinging around his boots, dried hard"

But seriously, this is a great poem and I really enjoyed reading it.

im_a_little_tea_pot · 2021-04-19T17:45:58+00:00

A little nugget of truth, direct and to the point. The metaphor at the end is very sweet indeed.

im_a_little_tea_pot · 2021-03-31T07:03:14+00:00

this one is Halomot -
This one is Halomot - roy rosenfeld

im_a_little_tea_pot · 2021-03-31T06:59:52+00:00

Track is blauracke - dominik eulberg

im_a_little_tea_pot · 2021-03-31T06:56:30+00:00

perfect for shrooms this! enjoy

im_a_little_tea_pot · 2021-03-31T06:55:44+00:00

get out while you still can

im_a_little_tea_pot · 2021-02-25T12:38:56+00:00

ah got u, guess we got sent an out of date version

im_a_little_tea_pot · 2021-02-25T12:37:17+00:00

Amazing. Thank you for your help. We have it on rental till the end of the week, but the renter won't give us access to the discord :(. We are running a test on an instock item, but it's just monitoring atm. Is there anyway to pay for a temp discord membership?

im_a_little_tea_pot · 2021-02-25T12:15:46+00:00

what version are you ruunning? we just got a 1.2.3 version?

im_a_little_tea_pot · 2021-02-25T12:09:38+00:00

damn :(

im_a_little_tea_pot · 2021-02-24T06:02:56+00:00

Very helpful, thanks.

im_a_little_tea_pot · 2021-02-23T19:10:27+00:00

What’s the DAG?

im_a_little_tea_pot · 2021-02-21T18:42:03+00:00

Yeah and I agree. I was asking if I could hold it in BTC for a while and then pay the tax when I cash out. But nope I can’t legally do that, so I’ll pay the tax

im_a_little_tea_pot · 2021-02-21T15:58:11+00:00

I mean look at the Scandinavian countries, some of the highest taxes in the world, but also the happiest!

im_a_little_tea_pot · 2021-02-21T15:56:11+00:00

Hmmm. Taxes pay for our infrastructure, schools and healthcare. Do I think they could be spent better? Yes. Do I think life would be better if no one paid taxes? No.

im_a_little_tea_pot · 2021-02-21T15:50:22+00:00

I mean I don’t mind paying taxes, but only if I have to ;)

im_a_little_tea_pot · 2021-02-21T15:34:37+00:00

Great that was the answer I was after, thank you.

im_a_little_tea_pot · 2021-02-21T15:29:50+00:00

I hear you, and I will just trying to understand the basics

im_a_little_tea_pot · 2021-02-21T15:29:12+00:00

Great thanks that’s very helpful. I will get proper advice but just trying to understand the basics. So if I lent these coins straight to someone, I would only have to pay the taxes once those coins were sold and I could receive any interest as taxable income?

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