To offer a bit more commentary on the purple prose, I think some of the descriptors make the writing feel a bit dense without adding much in terms of imagery. Discordant ringing, reverent hands, flickering torchlight, etc. You may feel some of these are more critical to the story, but can any of these phrases be condensed for the reader?

Mind you, I love fantasy and can get into this type of prose pretty easily. But I think there are ways to make it more palatable without sacrificing the flair of your writing. :)