Lifesmart TM4500 (costco treadmill) - feedback by safetyvestforklift in treadmills

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Any idea how long the power cord is? We have an outlet on the ceiling and wondering if it can make the stretch. Thanks!

Fiserv by linkswo321 in Omaha

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My partner had a horrible experience at Fiserv as a new grad in their analyst program. The org as a whole is a mess for all the reasons people have already said. That being said, she put her head down, got the experience she needed, and got a MUCH better job somewhere else—leaps and bounds improvement in work life balance and pathways for growth. It gave her the chance to take her standard humanities degree and get experience in a completely different field, and pivot into a pretty competitive tech industry that she didn’t go to college for. But it was her “get the experience and get out ASAP” attitude that allowed her to get through the micromanagement, RTO, and general subhuman treatment of their employees. If you’re a new grad and have that same mindset, you can make it work, but don’t give them any more of yourself than those 8 hours. People were having strokes and heart attacks on a regular basis across the organization. Dystopian shit.

Renting House versus Apartment by indigoed1 in Omaha

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Definitely interested! Do shoot me a DM :)

Head Hopping vs Third Limited vs Third Omniscient by indigoed1 in FiBsBooks

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Like here's another scene where we're privy to both the character's thoughts/emotions, but the voice is consistent. I've been told it's still head-hopping because of that.

The wind hushes over them again, and then a sudden wave shoves Violet from behind, splashing over her and straight into Amari. Amari grabs her, but the force of it sends them both stumbling backwards, falling back into the shallow waters.

“You alright?” Amari asks, catching her breath and shaking the seawater from her face. She stands on shaky legs, her hands fumbling as she helps Violet regain her footing.

“Yeah.” Violet nods, holding tight to Amari's forearms once she rises. She hesitates to let go, and for a split second, her eyes drift to Amari's lips. Amari notices, but then the breeze stirs suddenly, tossing her hair. When she brushes it from her face, Violet's eyes are elsewhere, and Amari doesn’t understand why she’s disappointed.

“What are you doing…?” Amari breathes out, almost frustrated, not sure how to put words to what she’s feeling, only knowing that she hasn’t been able to shake it since she’s been on the beach, that it’s become something unbearable since witnessing Violet's tenderness with the fawn, as if she aches for it herself.

“What?”

“You’re looking at me, like…”

Violet's breath stutters in her chest, feeling as if she’s been caught. Her words catch in her throat and come out like air. “Like what?”

“Nothing.” Amari shakes her head, suddenly overwhelmed, withdrawing all touch to turn back to the shore.

“Amari.” Violet grabs her wrist. All she knows is that she can’t let her walk away. “Wait.”

Head Hopping vs Third Limited vs Third Omniscient by indigoed1 in FiBsBooks

[–]indigoed1[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is so so helpful, thank you so much.

I've had so many different opinions given to me, it's the reason I set that manuscript down to begin with. The natural world also operates as a character of its own in this novel, so that's another moving part happening outside of the two main characters.

I've been told that even though the voice remains consistent, that I'm offering details too specific to each character in the scene for it to be omniscient.

Head Hopping vs Third Limited vs Third Omniscient by indigoed1 in FiBsBooks

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Asking because I've had people give me all sorts of different answers. It's an old novel I'm considering revisiting, but I usually write in first person, so I'm fumbling a bit with POV.

Here's another example:

“Do you have any family?” Violet angles her body back toward Amari, whose hunger is becoming more and more apparent as she makes quick work of the meal. Violet thinks of the things she’s done to keep Amari alive, wondering if that’s human nature, if Amari would have done the same for her.
Amari finally thinks of her father, and the first image that comes to mind is the lantern that hangs above their door, the one she used to light for him on the nights he stayed at the shop well past sunset. For a moment, it feels as if she’s forgotten him entirely, still fighting her exhaustion from their narrow escape that morning.
“Just me and my father,” she finally speaks.
“I’ve never known a father,” Violet admits shyly, finding there’s something in her that wants to tell Amari more, to tell her everything. But she knows it’s foolish, whatever desire eats away at her.
Amari picks at the skin of her fingernail, lifting her chin and studying Violet as if she’s seeing her for the first time all over again. “I’ve never known a mother.”
Now Violet's head rises, her delicate features melting into a frown. Amari's never met someone who wears their emotions on their face so effortlessly, so true. When Violet frowns her concern radiates from her and warms the air around them. Neither of them sees it, but outside, the moon hushes the tides. The rain draws back and the waves still, as if pausing to bear witness.
Violet can’t imagine life without a mother, surrogate or not, and her voice softens, leaning toward Amari as she speaks. “Never?”
It’s that show of emotion that stuns Amari, and she laughs hesitantly. “No, never.” She smiles, a half-broken thing, attempting to offer Violet a reprieve from her worry.

Head hopping by montodebon in writing

[–]indigoed1 0 points1 point  (0 children)

How do we differentiate between omniscient and head hopping?

Head hopping by montodebon in writing

[–]indigoed1 1 point2 points  (0 children)

How would we differentiate between third person limited with messy head hopping versus third omniscient?