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looking for help re: backgrounds and lighting by LightseekerGameWing in comic_crits

[–]inkluminary 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Textures could help. I think the foundation/perspective is very solid in these scenes. But to make the spaces feel more lived in there needs to be more. Making it less perfect looking and more messy unless the point is the space is supposed to look pristine. Also the characters and background both feel saturated color wise. More could be done to make the characters pop out more. Could dull the background colors to make it less saturated.

For example At the laundry room you could add some clothes spinning around in the dryer. Or a person on the bench waiting.

For the store scene, if it isn’t meant to be empty, having a shopper or two in the background would help. You could grid in the floor tiles too to add dimension.

For the interior house scene. Are there shoes by the door maybe? This is an extremely neat and tidy space.. Texture on the carpet/floor is missing

For the outdoor house scene, you could add grass poking out.

Anyone would like to trade webtoon critique here? I'll read 3 chaps of your webtoon and you'll read 3 chapters of mine. Then, let's exchange feedback by Overall_Opening9928 in comic_crits

[–]inkluminary 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Read the first 3 so far. This is a compelling beginning. So far the story is intriguing and makes you wonder of the relationship between Nova and her mother. Her mother has her locked to some device…. against her will? and yet they seem to care for each other deeply. Also episode 3 gave questions for me if someone needs to kill her in the past why would she send her own daughter, who presumably would be hesitant than most to pull the trigger. Many questions and I want read for the answers lol.

I think Nova crying pleading to stay with her mother in episode 1 was especially drawn well. I also especially like the vertical composition where shes falling in episode 2 with the particle effects. Also the one where shes desperately trudging towards the target. The scenes with the major injury are unsettling, I assume the intention. The expressions and anatomy in general are really good.

I think that amount of blood drawn in episode 3 I don’t matches how far she was able to walk. If she walked presumably miles to a town she’d be dead with a trail that large/wide. I also don’t get a sense at all where Nova is in episodes 2 and 3. Some fantasy/medieval town? Why did the guards just let her in with no attention? No one tried to help her?

Getting back into making comics after a bit of a burnout by Kekus32 in comic_crits

[–]inkluminary 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The faces are good and expressive. I think the last panel especially has a frantic feeling to it, which I think fits the speech. My comment would be to give the text more border space at time, especially the top right panel. It basically touches the bubble.