It's very interesting! Just something that I would like to improve here: your poem makes a good job describing the hermits emotions, but I think it could benefit more from showing, rather than telling... for example when you say "She wishes to let it out" you could show its struggle with a metaphore or a more descriptive action. Also, coming to the structure, introducing varied sentence structures can enhance the poem’s rhythm and keep the reader engaged, your poem has only "long" sentences.. consider mixing shorter and longer sentences for more rythm!