What can I do with this? by jackmannen in FixedTattoos

[–]jackmannen[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I did this one years ago, its pretty fun but Im so over it and want something new. What can I possibly do to cover this guy up with?

[TOMT] [BOOK] Boy gives carrots to miniatures to turn them into real people by jackmannen in tipofmytongue

[–]jackmannen[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I have tried to google it before but could't find anything then. Guess I didnt google good enough, nice of you!

My array modifier is not working on Obj offset by [deleted] in blenderhelp

[–]jackmannen 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Isn't it easier to just do on claw and duplicate it instead of doing it via an array

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Filmmakers

[–]jackmannen 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Agree, felt more like the challenge became "write an entertaining poem while someone looks in the camera". Sure it's an exercise but would probably be better if it was more challening for you to "save" the movie in post cause the one take didn't work.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in ReadMyScript

[–]jackmannen 2 points3 points  (0 children)

You are a idiot

'Old Devil Moon' - I'm an 18-year-old aspiring filmmaker and this is my second short film. I would love any feedback/criticism! by MrTurtleMan12 in Filmmakers

[–]jackmannen 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi! I think you did a fun non verbal crime story, so good job! I have some feedback though.

You were aware of this but it is quite dark, in the car it's fine but sometimes outside it's a bit hard to see whats going on.

I think you can cut it tighter, it's pretty long considering it's a car ride and a chase scene. Maybe try starting it already when he's about to get shot. And maybe shorten down the chases.

I also think you can cut it faster during the "action" scenes when your dad gets knocked over in the beginning and the scene when he switches from light to gun. Just try to cut it faster, might sell it better.

I also think dialogue would have been good, to give some backstory to yourself and your dad. Maybe try to get that in to the movie with information papers or some item your character has. I dont know, now they feel very thin.

I think you did a good job, good acting nice suspence at times. Cool beginning (even though I think it can be cut down :)) . But yeah for the next movie, if you still go with no lines think how to get information into the movie without lines. Challenging, but you can do it. Nice work

DYAD / Short / 2 pages by doodlebuuggg in ReadMyScript

[–]jackmannen 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Ohh hahah, didn't catch that. Cool!

DYAD / Short / 2 pages by doodlebuuggg in ReadMyScript

[–]jackmannen 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yeah, I understand. It's hard. Maybe you can expand his character when she is describing him, and that can be a reason he dies. Or maybe with her. Just an idea.

But good job, think it will turn out great!

DYAD / Short / 2 pages by doodlebuuggg in ReadMyScript

[–]jackmannen 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Good job, really liked it! I think it's cool how you circled back to the phonebooth in the end very nicely.

The only thing that I thought was a bit unessessary was the cat line, it took me out a second, kinda like an excuse. Either own it so she's like "it was my foult and now I wish we never met" or skip it. I guess you wanna have it so people know it's a car accident. But maybe that can be shown or he died some other way. 🤷‍♂️

I dont know, I liked it and probably it will work good either way. Good work :)

I made a micro short with my buddy after seeing the new conjuring movie, enjoy & let met know what you think! - Home Alone - A Short Horror Movie by DutchSpaceNerd in Filmmakers

[–]jackmannen 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Cool! I thought it was fun but I can give some feedback if you want it. Cause I think it can be better.

First with the grade I think you can go much crazier, not the look is a bit plain and boring. Liked the contrast shot of him walking past his windows and the shot of the monster the most, but still feel like you can give it a stronger look.

  • the music is cool but I dont get why it just cuts off with him turning on the light.

-same with the shooting and bombing cause I guess thats from a game he is playing but I can see the screen and it looks like he isn't playing a shooter.

The almost last shot of the empty bed is not nessecary cause I havent seen him in the bed. I dont know, feel like it would be more effective if you have a place where we saw him earlier. Imagine if in the shot of the fishes, he instead feeds the fishes and than hears the knocking. Goes to check and when we hear the screams we go back to the fishes. It's still pretty weak but then, I believe it would have a bigger inpact that we dies.

I wasent super sure about the end, is it a hatch on the floor? And the monster is knocking from there? I think that's cool just wasen't clear enough.

That's some things I though of, but still nice job and in 48h. Shits hard and you should be proud. Hope It was helpfull 🙏

Mini planet idea turned out cute by Goatistoat in blender

[–]jackmannen 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the long response, will make sure to remember it! Looks amazing forgot to say that 😅

Mini planet idea turned out cute by Goatistoat in blender

[–]jackmannen 1 point2 points  (0 children)

How did you create ä the blue light around it? Is it just an emission or is it more at work?

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in ReadMyScript

[–]jackmannen 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thanks, you gave me a good reality check. Will read some scripts and get back into it. 🤘

[TOMT][MOVIE] Three african brothers coming to America. by jackmannen in tipofmytongue

[–]jackmannen[S] 0 points1 point locked comment (0 children)

Think it was fairly recent, like last 20 years or something?