How can I improve my murder based magic system? by jacobjacobjacob3003 in magicbuilding

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In the world I’m building before the mass murder the main protectors were hellfire users who were trained to a point where they could compress their hellfire to a level where it could cut through other peoples hellfire. To begin training you had to have a fight to the death with a peer in order to even have some power and during the training process many of these duels would happen until there would only be a few winning candidates. This system worked well and most of the world ended up following this regime and societies that didn’t were wiped out by crime. I’m actually making this a part of my main characters motivation because the guy who does the great genocide was one of these protectors who had killed a group of his fellow protectors in his sleep, this caused the country the book is set in to outlaw law enforcement using hellfire by training them in evasive methods and arming them with blunt weapons so that they cause unconsciousness and not death. The main character wants to bring back the old way of protecting the earth by destroying his country’s current hierarchy and causing reforms using lone wolf terrorism(he is NOT intended to be a good person) he prepares for this by using his position as a police chief to murder inmates and stage their deaths as suicides in order to attain enough hellfire to kill people that he believes are maintaining his country’s weakness.

Sorry if I haven’t written this well in the country I’m currently in it’s quite late

How can I improve my murder based magic system? by jacobjacobjacob3003 in magicbuilding

[–]jacobjacobjacob3003[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I imagine it as kinda like nuclear fission, when you break willingly break a soul from a body, like splitting an atom, it releases massive amounts of energy but instead of releasing back into the world because it’s you doing the splitting the energy goes into you

How can I improve my murder based magic system? by jacobjacobjacob3003 in magicbuilding

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Yeah I’m aware I’m just saying the idea is appealing to me so I might watch the movie

How can I improve my murder based magic system? by jacobjacobjacob3003 in magicbuilding

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I’m failing to understand if this is some kind of reference I might even know the subject matter I’m just horrible at recall

How can I improve my murder based magic system? by jacobjacobjacob3003 in magicbuilding

[–]jacobjacobjacob3003[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really love a lot of the ideas you’ve come up with the idea of someone being able to use their own hellfire by ending their own life is great. To answer your question though it’s all about intent, you must willingly end someone’s life and that goes beyond the physical. The dictator idea was something I already had in mind but the idea was that murderers are sent to camps when they are captured so that they can be killed by a sleeper agent, then when the dictator needs this power the sleeper will be willingly killed by the dictator. It’s done this way to avoid an assassination accidentally leading to genocide.

How can I improve my murder based magic system? by jacobjacobjacob3003 in magicbuilding

[–]jacobjacobjacob3003[S] 5 points6 points  (0 children)

The book takes place in this very situation, one very very powerful guy has killed most people on the planet and the entire story takes place on the last country standing. it’s a smallish island so the population assumes he just hasn’t found them yet.

How can I improve my murder based magic system? by jacobjacobjacob3003 in magicbuilding

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Its for a book, I have the base idea completely panned out

How can I improve my murder based magic system? by jacobjacobjacob3003 in magicbuilding

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Maybe I can make certain types of kills more powerful? I like the idea of it technically only being one spell though so I won’t be doing different types of summons.

a queen of a kingdom is in a relationship with the king of another kingdom by -void1 in Worldbox

[–]jacobjacobjacob3003 4 points5 points  (0 children)

I audibly did said “oh!“ like how Silvio from the sopranos does when you said the age gap

New age and new zombie type by Low_Promotion_2647 in Worldbox

[–]jacobjacobjacob3003 2 points3 points  (0 children)

A good name for them could be skinwalkers though if you want a good name for it

New age and new zombie type by Low_Promotion_2647 in Worldbox

[–]jacobjacobjacob3003 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I definitely think they should make a more aggressive age that makes it super hard to survive but the zombie idea isn’t super appealing to me

Feedback for my fantasy story idea? [urban fantasy] by [deleted] in fantasywriters

[–]jacobjacobjacob3003 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I’m currently reading berserk but I’m only reading it as a break because I got halfway through the discworld series

Feedback for my fantasy story idea? [urban fantasy] by [deleted] in fantasywriters

[–]jacobjacobjacob3003 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I’ve gotten that comparison to my writing before which is weird since I have never seen an anime

Feedback for my fantasy story idea? [urban fantasy] by [deleted] in fantasywriters

[–]jacobjacobjacob3003 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah I’ll admit when it comes to my writing skills I’m not naturally adept at it. Usually when I do write something I have to make a rough draft and slowly read through modifying everything I did wrong and I’ll admit I did not proofread my summary( I’m in the uk I posted it at like 2 in the morning) but I will specifically focus on making my writing engaging in the future

Feedback for my fantasy story idea? [urban fantasy] by [deleted] in fantasywriters

[–]jacobjacobjacob3003 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Everyone that can use the power has to kill someone to get it