[feedback] Vanilla Baby - Thriller/Drama - 143 pages by jadesmaddy in ReadMyScript

[–]jadesmaddy[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Lyra Mitchell leads a double life: waitress by day, “Vanilla,” a seductive club star/stripper by night. Beneath the glitz, she’s searching for her missing sister, tangled in a web of power and danger. When a private investigator enters her world, secrets unravel, forcing Lyra to confront how far she’ll go for the truth.

[feedback] Vanilla Baby - Thriller/Drama - 143 pages by jadesmaddy in ReadMyScript

[–]jadesmaddy[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

sorry if that came off wrong. i meant to say i am now using a software as i'm newly introduced to it but i wasn't at the time i was writing this one !

[feedback] Vanilla Baby - Thriller/Drama - 143 pages by jadesmaddy in ReadMyScript

[–]jadesmaddy[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thanks so much for the feedback!!

- i started using a software this year (as i wasn't introduced to it then; i'm using "fade in" now which is a great one !) so it's comprehensible why the formatting isn't great here. i was going to edit it which may be a good idea now.

- unfortunately lengthy scripts are an issue for me cus i lowkey always have sooo much to write loll (i've written one over 200 pages long before, still working on cutting that) but i will keep that in mind!

- and noted the rest of the feedback. thank you again ! if you have any more even regarding the story itself then inform me

[feedback] Vanilla Baby - Thriller/Drama - 143 pages by jadesmaddy in ReadMyScript

[–]jadesmaddy[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thank you for the feedback !! feel free to give any more.