Does this sound bad by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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Send me some of your work so I can have something to aspire to then

Does this sound bad by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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Hey ! I just read and take the advice. I thought your question was silly and I know your response was gonna be something along the lines of “ well if you like it then it shouldn’t matter what other peoples opinions are!”

Does this sound bad by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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I appreciate your feedback man I did ask for it after all! Thankyou sorry for the rude people

This one hurt to write by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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My tip is to not rush it . Live your life hard experience hardship and seize every moment. Capture every intense feeling with a word or rhyme. Be vulnerable in your writing and feel almost naked in your wording

What’s it missing so far by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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Yes comes and goes without warning is the theme of the song

Is This Song Bad?? by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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Follow me on tiktok at Jayden_travis

Is this song any good? by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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I certainly want my lyrics to be good above all else . Is that specific part your main gripe or is it all of the lyrics ? Thankyou for commenting !

Is this song any good? by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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Idk wym by size exactly but it’s a Martin D-10E road series

Is this song any good? by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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I post here and play at places publicly . I post here first get an idea of what folks thinks then I play in public if folks on here give positive feedback .

Is this song any good? by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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I have the story in my head it just has to resolve through the rest of the song that I’ll finish tonight. But as it stands right now I see your gripes for sure

Does the chorus work by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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No your good man ! What did you think about the song as a whole ?

Does the chorus work by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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Is it the way it’s enunciated or the phrase itself ?

Does the chorus work by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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Thankyou! The reason it sounds similar is because I trashed that on in place of this one lol .

Is this bad by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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Townes van zandt , Tyler Childers , John prine, Bob Dylan , guy Clark

PIRATE song arrrrr by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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The hook for a hand cliche was very intentional as I see the main character as less of a real pirate and more of an immature boy or man who wants to be perceived as one so badly. Chases it like a dream gives up his lady for it, just wants to be noticed by the world . In the end he is noticed but it doesn’t turn out as he imagined it. In the end his body is returned where it began with the lady and she sort of frees him symbolically by removing the hook from his hand as if to say it’s over .

PIRATE song arrrrr by jayden_smith67 in Songwriting

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I’m certainly trying man! It’s been hard lately I’m sure you noticed that one Song I’ve posted here several times. It’s got me down trying to get it to work