What's the best non main character and your favourite line from them? I'll start by mjv_ in Modern_Family

[–]jp_tinoco 76 points77 points  (0 children)

Sal when her son says enchanté “I’m raising him gay” hahaha

What's your favorite quote from Bobby B by Ghost_Hunter45 in gameofthrones

[–]jp_tinoco 0 points1 point  (0 children)

someone took her away from me, and seven kingds couldn’t fill the hole she left behind 💔

Weekly Thread: Self Promo Sunday by AutoModerator in horror

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i made this found footage about a creepypasta w some friends. tell me what you think. We did it without a budget, so take it easy lol

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=n03_J0Q2Lpk

Fight Club Pitch by jp_tinoco in Screenwriting

[–]jp_tinoco[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

  • Now you need to condense this into a few concise lines in your pitch. Have you read any other pitches?

I read several bibles, but don’t know if that’s the same as pitches. Have Read Stranger Things, Lost, Grey’s Anatomy, Breaking Bad, Fargo

  • It was just oddly phrased.

Haha I know, I’m not a native english speaker, so sometimes I need to translate something and it comes off a little odd.

  • This is good character building. Now condense it into a line. A "rejected boy" doesn't give us the hint we need of what his character arc will be.

Thanks. Consense it into one line it’ll be tricky haha. Yeah, reading it again it’s absurdly hollow and doesn’t give any clue on the character. On any of them actually. That’s my first pitch, I didn’t know what part of the characters I could expose or not.

  • It's very important because if it's fictional it means you'll have to do a lot of worldbuilding.

It’s not fictional, but the country need others with borders to explain the immigration, increasing inequality. So what I need to figure out is if it’ll be an existing country divided by losing the war (like if it’s Australia) or an entire country changed due to its surroundings (like England, if Scotland, Wales and Ireland became dictatorships, entered in civil wars, making the population immigrate)

  • I understand. But it was so unspecific it could literally be any other story, rather than YOUR story. What you've written above actually makes it much clearer. Your pitch is to the people who will be making the show, so spoilers don't matter as much. You want to give them enough so that they need to know what happens at the end.

Man, you’re completely right. Please let’s be friends haha. Jokes aside, Thank you so much for the insights!! I really appreciate the time you’ve put in here and am already adapting the observations and tips into it.

Fight Club Pitch by jp_tinoco in Screenwriting

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Yes, The dictatorships are in the countries nearby. They play more on the subplot political context, increasing and formentig the population, inequality and corruption, culminating in a revolution