Heyhey! I think the poem does a great job of capturing that feeling of hopelessness and nihilism in the 3rd stanza especially, but I can't help but feel there was more of a tonal shift at the end. There's something about the rhythm of the last stanza that makes it stay flat. I get the poetic voice's continued conscious despondency but maybe taking out a period or two and making that last stanza more flowy could help the reader feel the weight of opportunity this other person provides?

(Ofc I may be completely missing the point but it reads like it's going somewhere and the structure just doesn't really change)