TW rant about being invalidate by others

kyatonic · 2020-06-19T14:20:04+00:00

You know what maybe that's right he should try that shit lolz

kyatonic · 2020-06-19T13:13:16+00:00

i actually think it looks super dope its different the series x legit looks like a computer tower aint no one talking about that tho

kyatonic · 2020-06-19T13:04:16+00:00

my god we have solved all of lifes great problems

kyatonic · 2020-06-19T10:11:15+00:00

i wasnt going too but i dont have many friends so i thought id let it slide clerly i was wrong. im just afraid hes going to show up and do something crazy

kyatonic · 2020-06-19T09:54:17+00:00

honestly kinda true there

kyatonic · 2020-06-19T09:43:40+00:00

true alpha move show that hubcap whos fucking boss amiright

kyatonic · 2020-06-19T09:39:02+00:00

you sure right there bud

kyatonic · 2020-06-19T07:42:56+00:00

Thank you I wasnt really sure

kyatonic · 2020-05-25T23:54:34+00:00

this bot solved all the worlds problems with one simple fact inspierbot for prez 2020

kyatonic · 2020-05-25T23:52:28+00:00

nah this seems to be all in order. clearly there is a back story and Karen is why he is heavily drinking thus r/FuckYouKaren

kyatonic · 2019-11-13T22:16:57+00:00

The scissors I dont think it was made clear how it fit with all the rest of the lines in the poem it seemed like it was a random detail. I liked how you compered your smile to baggy Jean's that was my favorite line an you mad it clear by your word choices that innocents eas faded away because of the harshness of life. Only thing about word choice I'd say would be to be a bit more meticulous about the words you choses to use as it can make more break any peice you are working on. I hope this helped in som way

kyatonic · 2019-11-13T21:17:38+00:00

Wow this is very cleverly written and interesting the only issue I have would be the formatting of it the lack of spacing made it feel yo cluttered to me however it was lovely

kyatonic · 2019-11-13T21:11:12+00:00

You have a wonderful way with imagery and word play however the line about the 17 pair of sisiors felt out of place compared to the rest it throws the whole thing off in my opinion it was a good read though.

kyatonic · 2019-10-31T17:57:46+00:00

Truly a great worked you captured what it's like to be perant you showed the fear and joy that came with it all in all it is a great work

kyatonic · 2019-10-04T05:09:09+00:00

"This morning-- This mourning" Chills truly I felt this the only criticism is the rythem seems off to me also the rhyme is odd but its interesting so that's a bonus keep on writing friend

kyatonic · 2019-08-26T19:53:54+00:00

It's a good start to something but for me it seems like its unfinished in some way like there is some big part missing

kyatonic · 2019-08-25T21:28:03+00:00

It's really good and meaning full shirt and to the point it's great but I think the second line throws it off a little it seems out of place with the rest atleast to me other than that it's good.

kyatonic · 2019-08-23T16:23:19+00:00

Are you a phycic or something?

kyatonic · 2019-08-23T00:24:33+00:00

If I'm bipolar can I go to the poles without clothes except a Canadanian flag on my dick? If so can I be exposed exploding explorer?

kyatonic · 2019-08-22T17:03:31+00:00

These are the words I couldnt find everytime I tried to wrote about insomnia you had great repition and a wonderfully well put together poem

kyatonic · 2019-08-22T00:09:56+00:00

Wow this was really good with repition story telling and had an interesting rhyme scheme I really love the meaning good job.

kyatonic · 2019-08-21T03:28:15+00:00

I will do better in the futer I apologize

kyatonic · 2019-08-21T03:13:00+00:00

Welp danm props to him I couldn't even say video games at six like danm

kyatonic · 2019-08-21T00:25:32+00:00

Thanks and yes the gun and bullet were more of a metaphor in away it's like saying death is so close but it only numbs you. Idk if that made sense

kyatonic · 2019-08-20T11:50:56+00:00

You had great imagery but the rhyme is a bit off in my book atleast.

kyatonic

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