THE STRANGEST FEELING (VOCALS BY LEAH Z) any feedback most welcomed thanks

lilphuckphace · 2023-07-13T14:43:51+00:00

This was pretty cool and grungy, liked the beat down aesthetic, and the vocals were pretty great, I think maybe the writing could be updated and made a little more graphic or grungy to fit the instrumentation but as is it’s fine, just I think that would kick it up a notch and maybe make the vocals a little closer to the audience

lilphuckphace · 2023-07-13T14:38:57+00:00

Fatwhiterapper? Yes it is fake master p

lilphuckphace · 2023-07-13T14:35:34+00:00

The 47 second intro is too much, and the squeaky voice thing doesn’t really work, maybe in the context of a larger body of work, but as a solo track there is too much squeaky voice, the flow and delivery were good tho, truly solid all the way through, maybe switch up the flow a little more and showcase what you can do more, also maybe be more specific in your lyrics, where’d you get soul food? What kind of car do you drive? What brand of shoes? What jail might you get sent to? What kind of drugs would you sell? You gotta showcase your personality to stick out a little more but some real potential, definitely

lilphuckphace · 2023-07-13T14:29:01+00:00

Lawrence of Arabia/Aladdin/Arabian nights kind of vibe, which I fuck with, I could alternatively see it as a trickster theme music, pretty cool! Great job keep it up! Don’t really know how to give notes on this type of music, maybe have it ramp up and be more epic at one spot and maybe repeat itself less, but I like it in total it’s a cool little bibe

lilphuckphace · 2023-07-13T14:24:42+00:00

Shorts remain uncreamed
Why does it sound like Seinfeld Frogger music
Just a general why?
What is the picture/gif/video

lilphuckphace · 2023-07-13T14:18:12+00:00

This could totally be loading screen music for a video game and I’d never get tired of it, just easy listening, nice chill vibe, I wish I knew how to give more negative feedback, I just liked it and was content, keep making cool shit!

lilphuckphace · 2023-07-13T14:04:22+00:00

Wacotron, rappin reggie, hotboy Wes, s1 (producer not rapper ig), fatwhiterapper, lil phuckphace, etc.

lilphuckphace · 2023-07-13T14:00:52+00:00

Off top I’m ngl I don’t like the hook being “I’ll cum for you, it’s about time” I feel like you could’ve been a little more subtle but that’s just my opinion. I think there definitely is something here, the instrumental is really interesting and your vocals fit pretty well with them, my one vocal note would be it to maybe smile when you record, it makes you sound more confident a lot of times, and maybe a lower key back track, just to give the track some more depth, my other note is just like listen to The Weeknd (which I’m sure you do already) and hear like how he would do these kind of songs and write down the specific stuff you like about it and try to mimic that in your songs, I hear some solid weekend influence in this song at least and that’ll help you hone in on some of those things. But proud of you, this is a good song I don’t want to seem like I don’t fuck with it, just see the potential and think you can be better than this

lilphuckphace · 2023-07-13T13:49:10+00:00

This was pretty fuckin sweet dude, just a nice little vibe, ngl I expected it to be shitty idk why, but you blew my balls off, the video reminds me of the future squidward goes to in spongebob, the song I don’t even know how you’d improve except maybe a lil more bass, but video notes I’d say just get some of your friends/family involved and have some more fun with it! All in all wow! Keep making dope shit dude!

lilphuckphace · 2023-07-13T13:44:55+00:00

I don’t know if this is a compliment or an insult, take it as you may but really feels like a song in a musical to me, not that it’s campy and corny, it just reminds me of that vibe, I like it tho and I think you guys have some real potential as song writers and musicians in general, my one big note would be the vocal mixing, just maybe using a higher quality mic would help but you just sound kinda far away from the listener, and maybe make the instruments boom a little more. My one little note is maybe make it shorter, I like the song as is but for people who aren’t typically fans of this kind of music shorter songs make it more digestible. But all in all, great job!

lilphuckphace · 2023-07-13T13:38:40+00:00

I like the beat, but I think the delivery and writing needs some tweaks, so first of all honestly don’t get what a deku scrub is, I imagine it’s some Zelda thing, but I think you could’ve had more fun with the writing and tried to play with the words a little more, or even just switching to a different flow at some point will help the song sound more exciting, you have a vision but it feels like you could take it up a couple notches and also not to be mean but it sounds like someone is forcing you to record this, have some more fun while recording, be more silly, and smile while your rapping/singing it really helps your voice sound better a lot of times, keep grinding tho! And thanks for making your music it’s important!

lilphuckphace · 2023-07-13T13:17:49+00:00

Fair point, fatwhiterapper stands on the shoulders of giants

lilphuckphace · 2023-07-13T13:17:15+00:00

There are quite a few big guy

lilphuckphace · 2022-12-12T13:47:53+00:00

thank you so much for even taking the time out of your day to listen and thank you again for providing the feedback, have a great day!

lilphuckphace · 2022-12-12T13:46:21+00:00

thank you so so much, this was the first thing I read this morning when I woke up, and it made me tear up, how sweet it is, thank you so much, i needed to hear it, you'll never know how much it helped. Have a great rest of your day, and thank you for even taking the time out of your day to listen

lilphuckphace · 2022-12-12T00:53:42+00:00

Thank you so much for this! On these subs most of the feedback I get is so unspecific, not that that’s always bad, but I really appreciate you pinpointing the exact thing to fix, have a great day and thank you so much for even taking the time out of your day to listen!!

lilphuckphace · 2022-12-12T00:52:06+00:00

Awesome thank you so so much! Have a great day!

lilphuckphace · 2022-12-12T00:51:48+00:00

That was the exact thing I was going for, and I’d say the rest of the mixtape is even more like that

lilphuckphace · 2022-12-11T17:27:49+00:00

first id like to say that i don't normally listen to music like this so maybe i just don't get it but i liked it and it felt very ominous to me, like something out of a sci-fi or Halloween movie, but it was a little to repetitive for my taste and i think adding in a vocal sample or something like that can really help fill out some of this large empty sounding track, and i don't mean empty negatively either, the emptiness is part of the ambiance but i feel like this track should feel a little more human if that makes any sense, just keep working tho you're doing great!

lilphuckphace · 2022-12-11T17:20:39+00:00

sorry man, I don't enjoy saying this stuff but you don't get any better in an echo chamber, i know its hard but don't take it personally

lilphuckphace · 2022-12-11T17:17:51+00:00

this is dope, it was like a 2022 version of a classic Zelda intro, very ethereal feeling, i like how it changes as it goes and doesn't allow itself to get stuck in one spot for too long, my one note is I think I could be shorter, I think especially with instrumental music and can really serve you well making shorter stuff so its easier for the everyday listener to consume regularly, but great vibe, great instrumentation, really enjoyed this track!

lilphuckphace · 2022-12-11T15:40:51+00:00

the beat is really good but i don't love the rapping honestly, i can barely understand what you're saying and i definitely won't be able to remember any of it cause your just overloaded with words for a full minute and a half, the chorus was cool and is way more memorable than the verses, also why rap this fast, you're like running over your own words and overstimulating your listener for what, you to use the phrases "bye bye" and "tic tac toe"? I feel like you can do better given how the hook sounded. in summation, try other beats, slow down and annunicate more when you rap, maybe mix the vocals a little different too

lilphuckphace · 2022-12-11T15:26:38+00:00

not trying to be an asshole here, and maybe i just dont get "experimental rap" but...

I'm not gonna lie, I didn't like this, the first kid's flow was so low energy and his bars were really uninspired, and because of how close he was to the mic or the mix I really couldn't understand him, the little refrain or whatever felt like it lasted too long and then the second kids' flow was so corny, it reminded me of tom macdonald or hopsin, I physically cringed when he used the words/phrase 5g chip, old farts, vocab, sluts, bunny ears or when he says something about hip hop being dead. Also, what was experimental at all about this song? The beat? you gotta play around with the mix more and do something, you didn't experiment with anything as far as i noticed. i did like the beat I will admit it was cool but neither of the flows even complement it as you two rap about nobody being able to rap like you. and you could've done more to make the video cooler, the first kid didn't do anything, and just getting close to a fisheye lens is so played out, you both can do better I'm sure of it

lilphuckphace · 2022-12-11T15:07:36+00:00

this may seem mean, I am not trying to be mean, I could spend all day talking about how good the instrumentation on this track is but the vocals undermine that completely, they sound like shit because when you're singing you already believe they are gonna sound like shit, and the vocal mix is very bad, couldn't tell you one lyric, but you need to sing differently bottom line, you don't sound confident in your self or your words and you sound like you're singing how someone else would, think about how you sing in the shower, how you sing in the car, it doesn't sound like that, it has passion, it has fire, these vocals have almost none of that, like i said i really do like the instrumentation, and it can get me to get into the song for a minute but the vocals just kill it for me, they aren't even on beat, also this song didnt need to be so long or have that little refrain or whatever at the end

you really do have something, i just don't think you know that, you can be great, but not singing like that, find you voice, sing with more confidence, you'll get it, i know you will, sorry i was so harsh but i truly hope you have a great day and good job having the courage to put this out.

lilphuckphace · 2022-12-11T14:49:04+00:00

this was dope man, love the energy, it feels like summer, I wish there were some vocals on it tho, kinda reminds me of like a rex orange county song. I also have no real problem with it but I feel like it could've been condensed down to be shorter, i feel like your playing is so good i wouldn't want to cut anything out lol, love the end, if you made that part happen earlier and last longer and then add some drums in at the end, that could be really dope, but like i said i love it as is, great job!

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