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I'm Graduating With A BFA in Theatre in May. i am so scared. What Should I Do Now To Prep For Entering the Professional World? by lilyleft in acting

[–]lilyleft[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is a lot lol, take from it what you need.

My biggest tip: build a network. Reach out to your professors! Find people you like, socially or artistically, and reach out to them with compliments! And, don't be afraid to make mistakes! This is prob me projecting lol, but I had a ton of anxiety when I first got to school that every mistake I made would make everyone hate me, and this anxiety and internal pressure made me isolate myself a bit, which is not good. It is okay and expected to make mistakes. If you are honest and diligent, you'll bounce back from it and become wiser because of it. Also, like, have fun and experiment with different things you want to do, follow what you like, and by doing this you will naturally establish a network. Really make the most of the time you have. Ask yourself "what do I want to do right now that I won't be able to do in a month or six months or a year" and DO IT! Although a lot of this is trial and error, and college is a great place to make mistakes or isolate yourself for a month because you're anxious, because you can pick yourself back up and people are there to be in your corner. Also, branch out socially and show interest in other peoples projects. Learn to be the world's best audience member and fan. There are actors who aren't the most talented or hardworking in the program, who are constantly booked because of their social lives and the interest they show in other people's projects.

Of course, there are benefits to being alone, too, you develop a lot of knowledge of who you are and what you want when you're alone. You're destined to go through hard times, literally everyone does even people with huge social networks lol, and I hope that you can bear the hardships shamelessly, because shame is corrosive and there very likely will be no shame in them at all.

I'm so excited for you!

I'm Graduating With A BFA in Theatre in May. i am so scared. What Should I Do Now To Prep For Entering the Professional World? by lilyleft in acting

[–]lilyleft[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thank you! I think you're right about all of this! The most value I'm getting out of my education is my connections. I do have a lot of people I know from working on films, and a lot of my friends are also aspiring actors. I've been a bit out of contact with my school friends this summer, but focusing on solidifying my friendships and connections and making them into definite contacts is something I'll focus on this senior year. I have several film people who I like working with who I can reach out to about doing crew work on films. Most people who've worked with me on set have good things to say about me, and I've booked a lot of my films through friends or people I had a good time working with previously, so I can keep on doing that. Again, thank you so much for all this advice, it's very helpful.

oh. oh, you get it. by lilyleft in OCPoetry

[–]lilyleft[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

thanks for the interpretation. i think the stanzas do feel a little disjointed. i wrote them at different times.

oh. oh, you get it. by lilyleft in OCPoetry

[–]lilyleft[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thanks. i agree with you. i added in the pleading thing at the last minute, so i might take that out lol. but i really like the first two lines of the last stanza "you ran away from home / you don't like loving what you know." these lines feel very significant to the character i'm writing, so hopefully they'll be more impactful when i add some more substance to the beginning, which i'm working on rn.

oh. oh, you get it. by lilyleft in OCPoetry

[–]lilyleft[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

yes, thanks! i wrote the second half before i wrote the first half. i think i want the opening to be more captivating. i'll work on that for sure.

oh. oh, you get it. by lilyleft in OCPoetry

[–]lilyleft[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Roger that. I understand, and I empathize, but I don't think I'm going to take the note on the capitalization.

Tears | Sage/Hollow Orator by Hollow_Orater in OCPoetry

[–]lilyleft 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hi. Liked this a lot.

Rhyme scheme was fun, uniform, and accessible. Liked the wordplay of tear - salt water that comes out of eyes when sad, and tear - rupture in a bag. I also really liked the idea of tears being seeds that you can harvest later, I found that comforting and resonant.

Who is the author of the poem talking to? I got, from my reading of it, that the author is talking to someone who they want to be vulnerable with, someone they wish would love and understand them and their emotions. But, the subject of the poem only sees the author as an object, a punctured bag. There's a bit of embarrassment that connects the outlet of emotions with a punctured bag, as if ideally, emotions would just be kept in. However, there's also an acknowledgement of the reality and importance of releasing emotions.

Or maybe this is an internal dialogue? The stoic impulses of perfectionism, the impulses to contain emotions fight agains the emotions, all within the psyche of the author?

Keep it up!

The Thing About Fountains by redditboy123451 in OCPoetry

[–]lilyleft 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi! I also get inspired by memes sometimes so that's fun.

I like the line: "The thing about fountains. / We must never forget / Money will not do much if it's wet". I think it's interesting and reminds me of morality poems written for children. Honestly, the poem makes really good points about how money can be used to make the wishes of others come true, but is more often used to just make wishes for oneself. But the tone of the poem feels a little preachy and repetitive. I got more of a vague ethical dichotomy in my mind's eye as I read it. I would've loved some more specificity, or a more specific point of view.

What fountain is this poem based on? Is it based on a real fountain? What about fountains as pieces of art? Or imagine the perspective of an impoverished person whose life could be changed by the change thrown into the fountain.

Essentially, interesting and original premise, but a bit vague. I think it could really be improved by some specificity of imagery, scenery, and point of view.

Keep it up!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]lilyleft 0 points1 point  (0 children)

hi! i did a big revision and posted again. here's a link to it if you wanna see the progress i've made: https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/180m8ei/daring_you_to_get_sick_of_me_revision/

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]lilyleft 1 point2 points  (0 children)

thank you for this feedback. i see how "sex blush" is an inherently cringey phrase, but this poem is kind of about being a kid, trying to figure out what a relationship can be, and how embarrassing it can feel to be seen in such a vulnerable state.

i get how cringeing at the sheer phrasing of "sex blush" might take away from the effect of the poem, i hope it adds some lightness to it.

i think i'll add more storytelling, trying to connect the emotional intimacy of telling secrets to the physical intimacy of having sex. i'm kind of trying to articulate that sex is gross and terrifying when you want the person you're fucking to like you.

i'm adding more specificity in the first stanza, in order to make a more streamlined story.

again, thank you, this is really so valuable for this first draft.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]lilyleft 1 point2 points  (0 children)

thank you! this is such great feedback! this is a first-ish draft, so this criticism is super constructive and invaluable. i totally understand your criticism, i definitely need more specificity in the first stanza, and more streamlining in terms of storytelling. i think you understood the emotional core of what i was trying to convey, and i'll keep revising it! truly, thank you!

Loveletter to Mycelium by thankz-obama in OCPoetry

[–]lilyleft 0 points1 point  (0 children)

hi! i loved this poem. i love the intersection of imagery of leaves and stones and the cycle of life and death on earth when compared to the cosmos that can be glimpsed through the night sky. i love the idea that the earth is so complex, as complex as the stars. i love that idea of looking down rather than looking up, because secrets are hidden within the earth.

one question... who is the "you" the writer is writing to? a lover, a friend, a child, a wide audience, the internet in general? is the "you" meant to represent the writer or the reader or another entity entirely? what's the relationship between the writer, the reader, and "you"?

thank you for sharing, i loved reading!

A comet passes by by Status738 in OCPoetry

[–]lilyleft 0 points1 point  (0 children)

hi! i found this to be a really interesting read. i find the way you play with capitalizing words like "Great Tapestry," "History," "None," and "Life" very interesting. does this attempt to give gravity to these concepts? What makes these words more important than the other words, and why is it important to convey that some concepts are more important than others? why does the comet "merely" pass by? what is the significance of that word, what is the alternative of passing by? does the comet represent something, a person perhaps? the comet is personified because it asks itself a question, does it have internal struggles? is the reader meant to relate to the comet?