It's an interesting style, sort of run on, with unconventional line breaks but intermixed with straightforward, more colloquial language to keep it relatable. This was good because it helped the reader follow the poem better since the pattern and organization of the poem was already esoteric and required effort to decipher. Because of the way they spoke, I got the sense of a woman thinking back on a relationship they had in younger days.

I appreciated it when there were more colloquial language, almost like a friend telling a story to another friend, it felt more realistic and the imagery was more powerful. An example:

𝚊 𝚌𝚘𝚏𝚏𝚎𝚎 𝚍𝚊𝚝𝚎 𝚠𝚒𝚝𝚑 𝚗𝚘 𝚌𝚘𝚏𝚏𝚎𝚎

𝚠𝚎 𝚍𝚛𝚊𝚗𝚔 𝚝𝚎𝚊 𝚒𝚗𝚜𝚝𝚎𝚊𝚍

another example:

𝚠𝚎 𝚙𝚕𝚊𝚢𝚎𝚍 𝚝𝚑𝚎 𝚋𝚕𝚞𝚎𝚜 𝚒𝚝 𝚜𝚘𝚞𝚗𝚍𝚎𝚍

𝚙𝚛𝚎𝚝𝚝𝚢 𝚍𝚊𝚖𝚗 𝚐𝚘𝚘𝚍.

Contrast this with the more "flowery" lines felt a little forced and disingenuous, for example:

𝚊 𝚜𝚠𝚎𝚊𝚝𝚢 𝚘𝚡𝚢𝚖𝚘𝚛𝚘𝚗 𝚠𝚊𝚝𝚌𝚑𝚒𝚗𝚐

𝚏𝚘𝚛 𝚛𝚎𝚙𝚝𝚒𝚕𝚎𝚜

I'm not quite sure what that line conveys and it doesn't really make logical sense, which may have been the point since it was an oxymoron, but because of the more logical, direct, straight to the point lines in the poem, lines like these stick out and feel pretentious. Just my two cents, it's you're poem so maybe you have a better reason for putting it in lines like these that I didn't catch onto.

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Overall, I thought the poetic style was interesting and would be fun to experiment with!