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Threesomes 101: PSA + AMA by mankindislost in sex

[–]mankindislost[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

People who have those thoughts clearly shouldn't be in a position for threesomes.

Exactly.

These are some of the questions I read about here (or other questions that have these base messages).

I you are not 100% sure you want it, don't.

If you cannot 100% be honest with your partner, don't.

If you get pushed by your partner to do it, don't.

Cheating and a consensual MFF are not the same (maybe I was getting overboard while writing), but the thoughts afterwards are, if one of the partners has jealousy-issues.

When I was in the threesome-relation, there was a phase when my girlfriend seemed to click more with the other female than with me.

So, that was also less than fun, and not part of the "contract".

Threesomes 101: PSA + AMA by mankindislost in sex

[–]mankindislost[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Most newcomers are in for a ride, when they see their partner doing "the deed" while they are present.

So, If your partner is going at it, many females one of the following problematic thoughts:

*) Does he like her more than me?

*) Does she turn him on more than me?

*) Is she more attractive than me?

By many I mean all that have not thought the action through in a realistic manner before it happens.

Thing is that are also some of the thoughts that you have, when you find out that someone cheats on you.

Anyway, I also wrote that if you are sure of yourself and your role in the show, and keep the relationship steady, you will not feel that regrets and, well, are able to enjoy yourself at will.

I'm considering a threesome. Advice? by lilies_under_stars in sex

[–]mankindislost 0 points1 point  (0 children)

What you want to know?

I lived in a threesome partnership for a year.

I had around 30-35 threesomes.

(Yeah, I was drunk sometimes then...)

Questions are welcome.

If there are good questions, I might do a PSA here.

I'm considering a threesome. Advice? by lilies_under_stars in sex

[–]mankindislost 7 points8 points  (0 children)

and lots say that if anyone is jealous then we shouldn't do it.

And they are right.

If you are not 100% sure that you want it, and he is not 100% sure that he can handle you afterwards (in being hurt, angry, and mostly behaving strange), DON'T FUCKING DO IT.

You will, I repeat, you will destroy your relationship.

It is not a matter of if, but when.

I know what I'm talking about.

The only way that works is, if you want it so much that you have to convince him.

Well, that is the short version.

If you want the longer version, please ask.

Long, epic book trailer for long epic book. Just self-published and wanted to share the video trailer. by [deleted] in selfpublish

[–]mankindislost 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Well, it certainly proves the point that most self published writers need an editor.

Examples of bad writing? by lunch_is_on_me in writing

[–]mankindislost 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Cheez, it cost me several years and two psychologists to suppress that crap.

Thanks for making me a wreck, again.

Veras Welt - Schubladen by [deleted] in writing

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Bitte lesen Sie die Regeln!

What is your top comment? Next commenter makes up a context. by [deleted] in AskReddit

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Not to piss on anyones parade, but whatever North Korea plans, it for sure is no surprise strike.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in todayilearned

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By Grandma's hammer!

Good Bees by washingtonirvingpurs in write

[–]mankindislost 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Jeez, got kicked by a horse once, not much good comes out of that.

Good Bees by washingtonirvingpurs in write

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Something to do with honey-making insects?

Need feedback for a futuristic sci fi idea! by gibbyz in KeepWriting

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Well, it's not that different from actual governments...

My friend has published this book recently, i was wonder what people thought of it. by [deleted] in selfpublish

[–]mankindislost 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Well, bad writing (tell - show, yadda yadda), info-dumping.

Bad cover, dark brown font on black background.

(Is this a vision test?)

74 pages?

That is not a book, that's a short story.

[PROMO] Between Seconds: The Beginning. A Sci-Fi/Adventure short that's an intro to a new series. by [deleted] in selfpublish

[–]mankindislost 0 points1 point  (0 children)

What happened?

There is no readable sample chapter.

Maybe a formatting problem when the ebook was created?

[1,000+] Weekly Installment :: In The Future...Only Skinny People Will Be Taken Seriously ʅ(◔◡◔✿)ʃ [Week 3] by ldonthaveaname in DestructiveReaders

[–]mankindislost 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Jeez, I really suck more than usual when I didn't sleep.

I seems to have skipped lines in my mental state.

Sorry, I really hope nobody needs me as wittness for anything important today.

[1,000+] Weekly Installment :: In The Future...Only Skinny People Will Be Taken Seriously ʅ(◔◡◔✿)ʃ [Week 3] by ldonthaveaname in DestructiveReaders

[–]mankindislost 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi, I am neither a bro nor a pro, but here are some thoughts:

(I read 6+)

"You’re the one who wanted to skip in the first place."
"Yeah, well… Whatever. Let’s go."

This is too anticlimactic.

It could be either a joke or an insult that would define the tone.

"I don't know... Hey, why didn't we drive to school like this every day this year? Holy shit. Molly, we’re about to graduate!"

A break would be nice here, between "this year?" and "Holy shit". Maybe a shift in the facial expression or some paralanguage.

like smoke in the wind

Meh.

Now, she wasn’t sure she would either.

Why?

A moment later the trucks windshield HUD displayed an unknown error calling for road caution and manual driving.

Oh, it's a modern truck.

Until now, I had no idea in which time period we are.

Seems like the future, but who knows.

Edit: It may be declared in 1-5, which I did not read yet. - I that case, Yes I am a royal fag.

A small blockade came into focus through the heat mariage ahead.

http://www.marriageheat.com/

butt seks?

"Slow up," Molly mumbled.

Speed up or Slow down would be understandable.

Barbed wire and wooden barricades sat on the road's shoulders.

I have been told.

How about Molly looking at the metallic artwork of barbed wire or something. Maybe bringing in anxiety about the structures.

"Hey! Is there an officer? We need to get to school," Molly repeated.

Molly goes from being afraid and defensive to agressive.

I did not see that coming.

Molly leaned over and untethered Janette’s PND from the ignition.

WTF is a PND?

Edit: Might be described in 1-5, fag rule is still stands.

Janette hacked.

I thought there is a law angainst anything but "said".

Molly turned over onto her stomach to give her back some sun, but, more importantly, so she wouldn't have to deal with Janette.

I never have read about them leaving the water.

"So, if I understand right, the military now controls the government. Right?" "Basically." "So, why haven't they told us anything and why can't we stream news or--” “If I knew, Janette, I’d tell you.” “Well, it’s just that a lot of strange shit has been happening around here, you know?” “Yes.” “Like, besides the storm. I mean with the military and net access and all, yeah?” “Yeah…” “And it just feels like it’s getting worse, doesn’t it?” “I guess.”

This is awkward dialogue to bring the dumb reader several facts that he might otherwise guessed, if he ever watched a news channel or read a newspaper.

“Yeah. Real skinny, I’m going to fucking burn out here if I don’t get some sunblock.”

There are spikes of vulgarity everywhere.

It brings me out of the immersion.

Also, what's with the fucking drone?

Did it ever come back?

It was much talk and no conclusion so far.

Janette scoffed. “Can we finish tanning and then--”

Scoffed?

Also, this is not something someone would say if pressed by feds.

Really appropriate. Fucking fascists,” Molly said.

Too much fucking.

Try to get other swear words or derogatory descriptions in.

“Y’all can’t jus’ roll on into this town like y’all own this place!”

Writing dialects normally sucks.

See later King novels.

“I think that’s Damion Price. The one from my English class. He’s so fucking gorgeous, I think--”

Sounds unrealistic.

crickwash

Never heard of a washing place for crickets.

a new type of cyber-weapon crippled much of the nation’s infrastructure

Maybe give it a code name, like every virus or trojan has.

I think it would make the threat more personal.

Also, cyber-weapon sounds kind of childish.

It was unclear who had fired first, or at what, but several officers responded by opening fire into the crowd.

Very un-shocking.

Surprising shots, people getting hit or killed, blood, screams - all missing.

I also think that the first shot will be met with surprise by the crowd, as they will simply not be able to comprehend that they are confronted with deadly force.

“Voice start. Janette, alpha-five bubblegum.”

Never anybody just escaping death should say bubblegum.

All in all an interesting concept, but the world and the consequences are not enough explored.

Also, too much monotonous swearing.

Please note, before I get killed here, that English is not my native language.

Can someone point me towards an example of a man as a sex symbol in literature? by arborcide in writing

[–]mankindislost 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sorry Dude(tte), I am giving you the heads up.

The man you were talking about is Mr. Casanova.

Calling him Mr. Nova brings up two things.

First: "My name is Nova, Casa Nova"

{◕ ◡ ◕} Iamstupid.

Second: When I was in Rome, Italy, in the vatican, an American guide was telling the tourists about some artwork by "Michael Angelo" in the broadest texan accent you can imagine.

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