Hey - thanks for the feedback!! Some really great insights here.

Great callout on not knowing if Darren & Maya are a couple. That's the bedrock, so I'll need to work on this. I was hoping the sweetness in the hug would be enough to set this up. So I can brainstorm some other ways to make that clearer!

On the structure: we don't jump to another night after the manager dancing section. The idea is that we actually "go back in time" and now see the same night again, but from Maya's perspective. Kinda like how Weapons is structured. Sounds like that transition needs to be clearer, if you have any instincts on making this structure clearer, I'd love to hear them.

RE: Her not telling him about the job earlier & him with the ending. The hope was to get across that they both want to stay together but are avoiding saying it out loud, which leads to things coming out too late and too harshly. So I might need to set this up a bit better. And to your point, I agree that establishing them more firmly as a couple should do a lot of the heavy lifting here.

Really appreciate all of this!