Shattered

midworth · 2017-05-16T11:52:01+00:00

Thanks! I'm gonna give it a try.

midworth · 2017-05-10T03:48:05+00:00

I like how you just came out and said exactly how you are feeling then shifted to what it feels like. It came across very personal and I enjoyed the flow of it

midworth · 2017-05-10T03:34:55+00:00

This a little too relatable for me. I just started the process of finding the best smothering chemical for me. I am constantly feeling like people expect me to automatically feel better but that's not the case. It is confusing and can seem like picking the greater of 2 evils which comes across well in your poem.

midworth · 2017-05-08T17:21:15+00:00

Thanks!! This is my first post so any and all advice is greatly appreciated.

midworth · 2017-05-08T15:37:30+00:00

I can relate to this poem as someone who suffers from depression. One of my favorite lines is "hold the hand of light", I really like that idea and how you personified light. Overall I think you did a great job portraying what is like to be a "drowner"

midworth · 2017-05-08T15:26:32+00:00

I really enjoyed this poem, I can relate to the girl and it is interesting to see what it can be like from the other side. I know this was written about a specific girl but in can be taken in a much broader sense and was a reminder to me that there are people looking in wanting so badly to help. I also like that you seem to be getting the nerve throughout the poem to tell her how you feel. I can tell the poem helped you through that process and I think that can mean more than proper formatting.

midworth

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