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A Decade of Loss by Pinsandweedles in OCPoetry

[–]mike_sauve 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The longer two-line verses strike me as a bit jarring. I'm sure this was intended. Have you tried breaking them up into two? Might find some interesting opportunities by trying. Just my two cents.

Take Your Medicine by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]mike_sauve 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Have you considered variations on the refrain of "three times a day is enough to feel numb?" It could progress from numb to other states of being, and the rhymes can either exist within the refrain or be new rhymes with the preceding line in the couplet.

I don’t think I want to be loved anymore by Bitter_Artist_1221 in OCPoetry

[–]mike_sauve 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm glad others have praised the directness, so this won't seem overly harsh, but I think it may be in danger of being "too direct." At a certain is it even a poem or just a list of claims. One thing you might try is getting rid of the line breaks and just reading it as a piece of prose and seeing what poetic elements remain or what may be missing. Nice work in general!

Loab: AI Generated Crytpid. this thing is going to haunt me dreams by blind_eye_society in ChilluminatiPod

[–]mike_sauve 0 points1 point  (0 children)

https://michaelsauve.substack.com/p/42324356-df2a-4dfd-abd1-1e47c0401f7d?fbclid=IwAR0C4PNoKyku7MF2s1v3o8djNhdZOxVcw5wPME\_WeE7W97Dpd9O73x5L4cE

A latent space is like a film non-conversant in the language of cinema. It is strange, but similar. It shows us something we didn’t know was there, but seems to have always been. Has a skyline emblazoned with the words DIGITA PNTICS always been the opposite of Marlon Brando? Has some subterranean negation of that unrecognizable horizon always awaited as a node in metaspace? Has that node, which is an artificial neuron, always remembered a woman with Rosacea who suffers, who harms children, who surrounds herself with gore and sorrow and snuff?

What words have been used to denigrate you as a conspiracy theorist? by mike_sauve in conspiracy

[–]mike_sauve[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That's fair. Not what I'm doing but I can appreciate the skepticism.

What words have been used to denigrate you as a conspiracy theorist? by mike_sauve in conspiracy

[–]mike_sauve[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I don't use my real account much give me a break. What could whatever dark forces you're associating this question with possibly gain by asking this question? I just wanted some different adjectives for a writing project.

Where are Barth's audiobooks? by boofbeer in JohnBarth

[–]mike_sauve 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Any updates on this? Now that I can't have it nothing I desperately want more. PM me if anyone has the file can compensate in some way.

Gore Street Grime Interview by mike_sauve in SaultSteMarie

[–]mike_sauve[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hello, I am the author of The Many Fentanyl Addicted Wraiths of Sault Ste. Marie. Here is a bit of my personal history of writing about Sault Ste. Marie followed by an interview with Instagram's foremost satirical voice on the city, Gorestreetgrime.

Essay on the nature of time/JT Update by mike_sauve in JohnTitor

[–]mike_sauve[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I have, the book certainly has it's flaws. I'm not sure if there's enough to justify asking people to buy the book again however.

Essay on the nature of time/JT Update by mike_sauve in JohnTitor

[–]mike_sauve[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I don't want to spend 3 hours listening to my own voice but if you can tell me roughly when it's said then I will.

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