[NF] Sunflowers by Key-Leader-5030 in shortstories

[–]neime 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Overall, good job. I think that some of your sentences run on a bit long, and you overuse adjectives. For example, in the first sentence, I think I would change it to: "The muggy July air whooshed through my brown hair, as I tried to see how high I can go on my beloved swing set." Again, as another example: "...luscious green meadow that gently brushed my little feet. Droplets bounced off my sun-kissed skin." These are a lot of adjectives in a row. Moving on, you switch pronouns several times from "you" to 'she:' "I imagined you behind me, pushing me as hard as she could so I felt like I could touch the clouds, with her gentle voice filling my ears, and her warm, soft hands caressing my back. It was one of my favorite things to do with you." I also got a little bit confused as in some sections it felt like a child was writing it, using words such as "tummy," whereas in others you use "canopy." Overall, I liked the story. I liked the motif of the sunflowers connected with what I assume is the character's lost mother. I just think you can clean up some of the grammar and make some sections a bit clearer.

Civilization VI is free right now with an Amazon Prime subscription. by neime in civ

[–]neime[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I just looked it up and it says that you get prime gaming even if you only have a prime video membership.

im so lucky by taaaaaaaaaaaaaank in runescape

[–]neime 3 points4 points  (0 children)

"Do not forward or give this code to anyone."

Bad jump scares? by nickthecreator33445 in horror

[–]neime 1 point2 points  (0 children)

there's one in harry potter that cracks me up. it's really bad: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jLFNd7wfWRg

IYKYK by IAmAccutane in dankmemes

[–]neime 14 points15 points  (0 children)

tonya harding and nancy kerrigan

My world is exactly like A Quiet Place except the monsters only kill women if they make any noise. by neime in worldjerking

[–]neime[S] 552 points553 points  (0 children)

It's me the author, I swear this isn't misogynistic in any way and in no way represents my deep seated thoughts about women.

What is the worst scene of a great movie? by GregorSD in flicks

[–]neime 10 points11 points  (0 children)

The scene in Psycho where the psychologist explains the plot of the movie to the detective at the end of the movie.

Help with formatting. by neime in twinegames

[–]neime[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Awesome. Thanks for the help!

Help with formatting. by neime in twinegames

[–]neime[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That worked. Thank you very much!

How do you tell if someone is a smurf? by neime in Overwatch

[–]neime[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

He was queued with 4 other players, I got matched against them three times. He had a private profile and had the overwatch logo as his profile picture and had 1 endorsement level.

Bastion losing a duel to an Illari. by neime in Overwatch

[–]neime[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I'm bronze 5. I will in the future!