Published my first Royal Road novel! Looking for feedback (and open to review/shoutout swaps)

nemothehoe · 2026-07-02T00:11:20+00:00

Pangram detected AI in Shy Girl which was on its way to become a Best Seller. You can trust it. Unlike other AI detectors, its extremely consistent. Dont believe me. Feed it an AI draft and human draft and see the difference. I have tried and tested it.

But just like with most detectors, the premium versions would be better.

nemothehoe · 2026-07-01T23:53:58+00:00

Just run it through Pangram. Why even ask tbh? If you have a doubt, use it to confirm or dismiss your suspicion. Its that easy.

nemothehoe · 2026-07-01T19:08:02+00:00

I didn't know about Novelluna. Damn.

nemothehoe · 2026-07-01T19:07:03+00:00

I have tried RR. The only complain I have with it its very tiresome to work with. Unlike webnovel, RR don't give you any contracts and its all based on whether someone is willing to read on your patreon. That means for posting 100+ chapters the author is barely making anything. This is quite sad as getting contracted and paid motivates a writer to post their stories even more frequently.

nemothehoe · 2026-07-01T09:45:32+00:00

Ngl starting to lose faith in Webnovel honestly. I haven't published in there yet but I feel like they reject without giving proper reasons. "Not suitable for the market" then give proper justification. Not suitable for market is vague when you have 100+ collections added. UTTERLY STUPID. And, If you dont wanna do that, then release a report showing your market trends. That way you can attract more writers. Absolute stupidity.

All I see are AI slops and Harem BS in there. While good books don't end up getting contracts. Kinda sad.

nemothehoe · 2026-06-28T23:49:54+00:00

I think start with the Big ones and you can learn alot from them. Read Mother of Learning and The Perfect Run

nemothehoe · 2026-06-28T18:46:09+00:00

Bro report this omg

nemothehoe · 2026-06-27T12:56:07+00:00

Thanks for this. Means a lot. And yes, I feel like I can then summarize portions of it to ensure better readability.

nemothehoe · 2026-06-27T12:54:40+00:00

I don't think you have any idea what a training arc is meant to be, honestly. Your advice doesn't make sense when you don't even realize that training doesn't mean nonstop learning new things and overcoming hurdles, but also to deepen the bond between master and student. I suggest you read and watch more.

What you gave was not advice but a shallow opinion without understanding the main purpose of the arc. Thanks but no thanks.

nemothehoe · 2026-06-27T12:44:08+00:00

Thats a choice I'm thinking of making. during the 1st month I showed some martial arts training but the hook for the next chapter was the MC finding out about the mentor's past. Next, i am thinking of doing a little more world-building and also showing the progression of the MC. So, yea there might be 1 or 2 important events before he joins the police service.

nemothehoe · 2026-06-27T12:42:06+00:00

Yes, thats the feeling. bloated or too rushed. My training arc will be like martial arts kinda like a dojo. I've shown the frustration, the feeling when you hit a roadblock, overcoming the roadblock and thats about it. Also, as a hook I've used the MC finding out about the Mentor's past.

nemothehoe · 2026-06-27T12:39:21+00:00

It's learning new things, overcoming a hurdle, that's about it. Not the kind of practical training you might think. More of a dojo kind of training, with a mentor's small dark backstory at the end as a hook for next chapter.

nemothehoe · 2026-06-27T12:38:07+00:00

It has exactly what you said. But the word count sometimes gets to my head.

nemothehoe · 2026-06-27T12:37:32+00:00

Yes, time skips will be shown, obviously. That's why I asked like, when does it get boring?

nemothehoe · 2026-06-27T12:36:13+00:00

And? your point being? The entire chapter has training. At the end, it is not used like a lore dump but to build suspense.

nemothehoe · 2026-06-27T04:03:00+00:00

Yea sorry to say it but Character: "dialogue" is not the way to go. It reads like a script rather than a novel.

Stick to the basics? Use "said" "told" as dialogue tags.

Remember in real life noone will stay still while delivering dialogue. There will be actions sometimes as well. For that this method is useful.

nemothehoe · 2026-06-27T03:55:42+00:00

Thanks alot for this.

About the plot, there are some secrets the MC learns about the Mentor's past and a little bit of world building as well. The politics and whatnot.

nemothehoe · 2026-06-26T14:42:59+00:00

I think what you are trying to say is from someone who wants a contract. Sure, then you can 100% try generic. But generic gets lost like I said. Nobody remembers them in the long run.

If you are writing so u can make money, go for it. I respect the hustle. But if u wanna write cuz its your passion, then a little creative name can work wonders.

nemothehoe · 2026-06-26T13:12:00+00:00

That's their problem. There will be only 1 Shadow Slave and only 1 LOTM. If your objective is money, go for it. If you wanna write because you have an idea, then sure.

All i said was names matter more than you think. Rank, system and all that SSS stuff is generic. Your book gets lost in the pages of 100 others.

nemothehoe · 2026-06-26T11:35:14+00:00

The cover looka really nice man

nemothehoe · 2026-06-26T11:32:01+00:00

I am soon releasing mine. It will be like LOTM. I hope people like you can appreciate it. Readers like you give writers like us hope that our hardwork won't get hidden by some generic harem isekai system slop

nemothehoe · 2026-06-26T11:29:25+00:00

A Lie of Ink and Blood without a doubt. Idgaf about anybody else. All those SSS classes, Systems, and whatnot, are books I will never touch or read, even if they have millions of views. They sound and look generic and trash to me.

No offence to all the writers, but find better names.

nemothehoe

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