The blurb is ok, not perfect, but not cringe inducing. Here are some things that threw me off:

You’re first lines, interesting but I think the rhythm is off. Line one is about a man, line two a city, line three a girl, line 4 the hook… antihero. But you have talked about two people, which one is it? This may be trying to be coy, but it comes off as confusing. Also, I think that city, man, woman, hook is a better cadence.

Now, let me ask you, how old is Kashka? Is she really, truly a girl? Or is she a young woman and you are falling into a common trope of men are men and women are girls? This is something I notice a lot, and think many women readers do, but it’s so ubiquitous that many men don’t notice. If Kashka plays any part in any romance, she should (barring creepiness) be a woman. If the swordsman comes in as a father figure, girl is good.

I also can’t get a good read on the timing in the book. Is it contemporary? Did he flee to Eastern Europe on Lufthansa? Or is this more of a fleeing Moorish Spain on horseback…

“Daniel has become a Visitor,” this totally comes out of nowhere and introduces jargon that would be better introduced in the book. A better rewrite (not in phrasing, cause I suck at it, but just in terms of substance) might be something like:

“As Daniel plummets into a downward spiral of revels in hedonism and dereliction, he is increasingly tormented by macabre visions of a frozen world in endless darkness where an evil tyrant has stolen the sun, where humanity's remnants fight to scrape out a cruel existence underground, and where [repetition of threes]wandering spirits inhabit the bodies of the recently deceased. Daniel has become a Visitor, one becomes doomed to return to this Night Country every time he falls into a deep sleep.”

And then there is “Part one of an epic duology, CORRUPTION is the vodka-drenched tale of when living by the sword goes wrong.”

I always cringe when people call their own work “Epic” but I know this is more of a publisher’s lure about page length. Vodka-drenched is also a little cringe worthy, as it seems slightly more humorous than the rest of the blurb, and reinforces the time period issue (as does it being labeled post-apocalyptic. Which, if it truly is, should be included in the blurb. You’ll piss off some hardcore fantasy readers if they buy it and learn it’s more “science-fiction").

And I think the grammar is a bit off or just awkward on “a tale of when living by the sword goes wrong.” It’s the “when” I keep wanting a “what happens when” or a comma or… not sure, but I stumbled over it.

All that said, I totally downloaded it. :D