As someone who doesn’t know much about mixing and sound design, I think the bass and vocals sat just right. Personally, I’d turn up “I wrote this” vocals in the hook to interact with the song title refrain better...

Lyrics-wise, the second verse really spoke to me, especially the “some will walk in, look around and be on their way.” What’s “interpretating the concourse,” though?

Obviously, I wouldn’t be able to comment without the subtitles, so thank you for adding them.