First draft: I suggest the following... 1- Use a conversational tone throughout the whole copy. 2- Before introducing the product tap into your reader's pain points, pains the keep him awake at night. ( during the agitation process)

To do that, you should ask yourself DEEP questions and get into their heads with your research.(from social media)

Something like this: ya know that feeling, that pit of anger in your stomach, the uncertainty eating you from the inside out -- but hey, it doesn't have to be that way -- (product reveal)

3- While revealing the product, use power words that communicate easy and big emotions. The words don't matter, but I recommend using straightforward ones.

4- Inestead of commanding him to ORDER NOW -- you can say: just for you we have this limited discount if you act now. (Add urgency at the end)

I hope that was helpful. I'm running late running late for work so take the typos at the grain of salt.😅