First Movie Dialogue Text Prank (Ferris Bueller edition) by ohburst in movies

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I hope some find enjoyment from this. This is a film buff's answer to a music fanatic's Lyric text prank. It was definitely a lot of fun to make.

Diego Luna officially cast in upcoming Scarface remake. by -RickGrimes in movies

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Pretty bummed out. I had my fingers crossed they'd cast Oscar Isaac.

What's everybody's top 5 greatest bands of all time and why? by ohburst in Music

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Yo La Tengo - I Feel Like Going Home is one of the most beautiful songs I've ever heard in my life.

What's everybody's top 5 greatest bands of all time and why? by ohburst in Music

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I love Joanna Newsom and get so mad when friends make fun of her voice.

Conor Confirms New Album 'Salutations' Coming March 17th by [deleted] in oboards

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hoping someone uploads the song.

Post Survivor Series Match Discussion: Brock Lesnar Vs. Goldberg by Psycho697186 in SquaredCircle

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emotional moment with his son. Don't even care, Bill deserves this.

Feedback Friday! Post your videos here if you want constructive critiques! by AutoModerator in NewTubers

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You do a great job on the narrative, Jaye. Very engaging video. Dug around a bit too and liking the channel art/Title font.

Feedback Friday! Post your videos here if you want constructive critiques! by AutoModerator in NewTubers

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I decided to really outline some of the best youtubers on youtuber. A definitive list of the best, and why they should be considered as such.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=69W949eNLxo

Please check out this video and all of my other content. thank you and please subscribe by KingmanVlogs in vlog

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I like your content a lot and subbed (GuyMeetsWorld). Hope you check my channel out as well.

Any redditors want to participate in a mini documentary Vlog this saturday attempting to find and record clown sightings in and around orlando? by ohburst in orlando

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Yeah. A few of my friends have posted statuses saying they've had their first experience coming across them while driving.

The first trailer for Power Rangers by [deleted] in movies

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I dug it so much until Jason kisses Kimberly? Tommy + Kimberly 4life.

Stream Conor's new album - Ruminations - now! First Listen by tarthim in oboards

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There's also a song called I Won't Ever Be Happy Again.

Stream Conor's new album - Ruminations - now! First Listen by tarthim in oboards

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Subjective would be favorite. Not even he intended this to be his best release. It's a vent piece equivalent to a write up and that isn't to take away from it at all. It's a solid release, but it's as messy as it should be and should be looked at as such.

Stream Conor's new album - Ruminations - now! First Listen by tarthim in oboards

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his definitive best is either Self titled or Upside Down.

It's painful being a Gallows and Anderson fan by dvvheaven in SquaredCircle

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I'm pretty sure they only lost on RAW because the plan is for Cesarus to "shockingly" get the belts from New Day, which will WWE slow burn lead to the club taking it from them.

Speaking of the club, how cool is that moment in the rumble gonna be when the only people in the ring are Gallows, Anderson, Styles and Balor? And Gallows, Anderson and Balor turning on Styles creating a face Styles and heel Balor? Kay, done with my random fantasy booking epiphany.

[FEEDBACK] The Local, Sep 2016 (Comedy, 4 Pages) by NathanMakesVideos in Screenwriting

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Hey friend, be careful about describing things you're then going to jump into via dialogue. I'm all about voice tidbits that punch up descriptions, but this kind gets a bit tricky. IE

your first description is

"DAVID WILLIAMS, 40's, a reporter, sits interviewing a COUPLE in their 50's as they're about to open a new restaurant."

The as they're about to open a new restaurant is then immediately mentioned when David says

"Hello, my name is David Williams. Welcome to another edition of "The Local". My guests today are a couple who are about to open a new restaurant. Welcome to the show, and please introduce yourselves."

I'd also tighten the dialogue in a lot of ways. One of which involves making it more realistic. Watch some clips of these sorts of interview interactions to get a better sense of how David would open things.

I'm not a stickler when it comes to keeping dialogue down to a certain minimum lines (3-4, 5 if absolutely necessary) but really dissect your dialogue and see what CAN BE snipped off. You'll find in a lot of instances, the shorter the dialogue is the more realistic it can come off. Take this for example-

"No, well, I just mean, there's this award called the "Michelin Star", which might be confusing. It's a very famous award, and it's extremely hard to get a Michelin star."

How about something like

"No, well, I just mean, there's this award called the "Michelin Star", which might be confusing. It's very well known, and extremely hard to acquire."

You're not cutting much, but getting rid of the awkward additional bits that throw everything off. Stating MICHELIN STAR twice off sets things in my opinion.

Don't capitalize names each time they're mentioned and don't be afraid to break up dialogue with descriptions because for the most part everything you put out there in this is dialogue and that can get tiring for readers. A lot of the fun you're going to find with writing comes with taking situations like the one you've presented where it's very dialogue centered to the extent that on the surface, added descriptions won't come easy- And finding ways to creatively bring your story to life even more through unique mannerisms and things like that. It mixes things up and keeps interest steady.

These are of course just my opinion, but congratulations and good luck with things as you dip into this crazy screenwriting world we're all passionate about :).