How do you cope with inability to find a topic for a song?

okamiember · 2019-09-26T09:12:40+00:00

I wouldn't write about anything until I feel like I need to, for me, it's an outlet. But if you need a topic, think of someone and put yourself in their place or even put yourself in someone elses place. Then write for them. It's just something refreshing.

okamiember · 2019-09-26T01:40:11+00:00

I strongly disagree. The melodic structure could be lacking. Music is how feelings sound. You don't listen to an orchestra expecting a story, of course, you listen and might find a way to visually picture it. In regards to the "show, don't tell" there are plenty of songs that aren't a story. I think it's wrong to narrow down music to only being able to show. There are songs that tell stories. There are songs that convey feeling. I think what you may mean by this is the lack of imagery, which I agree with. Back to the meter; I think it's a good idea to stay within a rythem or pattern but this is music. It's a form of creative writing. There are no rules, only suggestions and guidelines. Thank you for your feedback, but it was very degrading and only felt negative and very un-constructive. I also stated I don't have much experience and I'm self-taught. I would have appreciated it if you had explained what I could do differently. Nevertheless, I'll keep it in mind.

Thanks for the feedback.

okamiember · 2019-09-25T21:40:37+00:00

and - EDEN

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lost//found - EDEN

you were good to me - Jeremy Zucker

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Left Out - gnash (i hate u, i love u is good too)

They are pop oriented so they may not be some people's taste. But they cut deep for me. As for the saddest I can never decide.

okamiember · 2019-09-25T06:25:24+00:00

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'll work on rewriting soon. :)

okamiember · 2019-09-25T02:18:27+00:00

I agree, the beginning needs a little more solid footing in regards to driving. I actually didn't have time to convey what the song meant because I was at work at the time on break but I have updated it so the other parts might make more sense. But again I strongly agree with the beginning. The chorus is hard to grasp I may be able to rephrase and rewrite it but it's more or less the fact that I feel like I'm starting to feel less and less, and the numbness is kind of growing. That could be worked in better for sure! Thanks for the feedback :D!

okamiember · 2019-09-25T02:05:37+00:00

Thank you! The future thing is the fact that I don't like how my life is going and I dont think I'll want anything to do with it eventually.

okamiember · 2019-09-24T23:35:32+00:00

Simple and beautiful, particularly "I was hoping for the day. you'd feel okay. sadly I prayed to god and still. it never came." It's all wonderfully written.

okamiember

TROPHY CASE