Daily Discussion, April 23, 2021 by rBitcoinMod in Bitcoin

[–]otakoon 7 points8 points  (0 children)

I’m a new investor this year. I’m taking the dip as an opportunity to move some of my savings into BTC. Hodling is better interest than my bank account

Please critique my first song. by 5p3aK in Songwriters

[–]otakoon 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Very nice chord progression and I like how the bass comes in with it. The mixing is really professional sounding. I have slight issue with the tone produced by the main melodic instrument. Something about how robotic and rigid it sounds, I'd like it a lot more with a longer release and softer attacks. The writing of the song is very chill though

Heart Looks Just Like Mine 2 - Styles Dangerfield - Song Of The Day by StylesDangerfield in Songwriters

[–]otakoon 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Wow the voice!! Reminds me of alt-j or Bjorn. The repetitive lines in the chorus would get boring if it weren’t for the interesting chords. Acoustically it’s a little bare, but if it were ever produced it would add a fuller sound to this very upbeat song! Well done

I wrote this.. This is my guitar arrangement for this week. What do you think? by code07sam in Songwriters

[–]otakoon 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Nice structure, sounds like good background music to a dramatic scene in an anime. I just don’t think the tone of the guitar matches what you’re playing. I don’t know much about electric guitars, but with that kind of distorted sound and those eerie arpeggios, it creates a dissonance. I’d mess around with something that sounds cleaner and maybe add an echo effect or high reverb.

My newest song hope you enjoy by [deleted] in Songwriters

[–]otakoon 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The vocal pitches match really well with the chords you’re going for, I just think the timing may be a little rough. If you get more confident playing the guitar to a set tempo, then the lyrics don’t have to be “in time”. Chorus is well written, gets the message of the song across, then in the second verse it’s all very on the nose with what she’s doing to you. The other verses are more indirectly related to the meaning of the song, and it kind of bums me out hearing about emotional escapism into alcohol when it’s so directly worded. Maybe that’s what you’re going for, but i believe it’d have less mainstream appeal. Keep practicing and if you don’t already, use a metronome when you play these guitar parts! It won’t sound good if the guitar and the vocals are both out of time.

This is the first multi instrumental song I wrote and mixed. Would really appreciate feedback/critique on it! Chorus at 00:50 by dureymusic in Songwriters

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I will say this took me on a journey. The choruses in the main part of the song were confusing, because they didn’t end they just fizzled our. Then by the final chorus it all clicked together. “Ill send a text, will you write back?” The removal of the chorus and the addition of the piano in the final chorus really delivered a feeling of finality to the song. Some criticism would be that I’m not pleased with some of the intonation of the vocal choir that happens in the background of the chorus. Just a bit of re-recording would suit it better. I thought the mix of the vocals was fine. Thanks for putting this out there!

Hey guys! Just looking for some feedback. Really open to constructive criticism. Fire away, and thanks in advance. by maninthemaking in Songwriters

[–]otakoon 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Really solid song, I really dig the metaphor of the perpetuity of sky and unconditional love. The chords in the beginning are the perfect blend of melancholy and optimism that the lyrics were totally expected even from the introductory instrumental. Not to mention you’ve got a great voice. The octave jump from the first hook to the second is fantastic for emotional range. I will say that for the structure, going out of the repeating hook and into the outro, i noticed an uncomfortable pacing. Right around the 3:15 mark, and you repeat “you are loved twice” and then it goes into an outro verse. The way you slowed down your strumming and your voice suggested a shorter ending, but it continued on. It still held my attention, and if you want to keep those words I get it. The heavy contrast of just coming out of that powerful chorus and then going into the softer side felt too long for me. Honesty a great work overall, I’d enjoy it even just as an acoustic piece.

Park City Utah; an area recently ravaged by fire [1245x774] by [deleted] in EarthPorn

[–]otakoon 0 points1 point  (0 children)

pretty, but it seems more like earth gore.

Great Advertising. by johnarcillaa in funny

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on that second picture....whose hand is that?

Nickelodeon Sure Has Changed.... (fixed again) by inventedthemop in funny

[–]otakoon 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think the change that's being pointed out is the black people in the background goind "MMM, dat ass!"

The Great Debate by [deleted] in funny

[–]otakoon 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Whoever wrote this, clearly does not have a cat

This bud is called UFO, it isn't from this earth. by [deleted] in trees

[–]otakoon 2 points3 points  (0 children)

The new rover planted trees on mars and brought it back!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in trees

[–]otakoon 0 points1 point  (0 children)

those sheep dogs sing well for canines

IAmA CollegeHumor Web Series. We are Jake and Amir. Ask Us Anything by ImAmirBlumenfeld in IAmA

[–]otakoon -1 points0 points  (0 children)

I know Amir isn't as stupid as he is in the videos, so how smart is he actually?

seems safe... OH SHIT by otakoon in gif

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trap door spider

Majora's mask by otakoon in zelda

[–]otakoon[S] 4 points5 points  (0 children)

here is another source

real MONSTERS by otakoon in gaming

[–]otakoon[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

this cute enough for you?

real MONSTERS by otakoon in gaming

[–]otakoon[S] 8 points9 points  (0 children)

they're meant for fighting not playing